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some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of the environment while others think this is the responsibility of government. discuss both views and give your opinion.

first I believe that ever "individual" has to take care of the environment and they should look it has their "responsibility" to take care of it. In my opinion both individual and government should take care of the environment. First of all, every individual has to plant the tress in their daily life. they should take it has a challenge for "taking care" of it. The specific persons should water the plants every day And they should shape the plants by cutting into certain amount of leaves
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first
I believe that ever
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individual
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"
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environment and
they should look it has their
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responsibility
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"
to take
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care
of it. In my opinion both individual and
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government
should take
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of the environment.
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First of all
, every individual
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has to
plant the tress in their daily life.
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they
should take it has a challenge for
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"
taking care
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"
of it. The specific persons should water the plants every day And they should shape the plants by cutting into certain amount of
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leaves

IELTS essay some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of the environment while others think this is the responsibility of government.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
86 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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