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“Some people believe that exercise is the key to good health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important.” Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

“Some people believe that exercise is the key to good health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. ” kwM2
Majority of people are worrying about their health and looking for the ways for reaching healthy lifestyle. There are two different opinions about this that people believe - physical activities or proper nutrition. Doing daily exercises is more far better off for people who want to be healthy than having a diet. Diet has been recommended by doctors for having a healthy life. The reason is that nutrition is the most important part of our lives and our health is related to this, they deem. For example, almost all of diseases are curing through dietary ranging from the illnesses of internal organs to even organs of vision. Therefore, healthy and special foods have been being preferred by humans for healthy life. On the other hand, doing exercises daily is more worthy for health needs of people, because people who always do training seems more younger than they are and they live longer - the key of this, as they said, their method. My grandfather tried nearly all types of sports and did them on time, he is continuing to do exercise and now he is 97 years old, nevertheless he is still energetic as a result of his suitable position. So, if someone wants to be healthy, exercising is the best way to achieve his aim. To sum up, there is a question that which one of the ways of being healthy is high resulting and doing exercises as well as having a diet are mostly debating. The people who prefer doing body training are healthy rather than the supporters of dietary, I think.
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lifestyle. There are two
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people
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physical activities or proper nutrition.
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Doing
daily
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exercises
is more far better off for
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people
who want to be
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healthy
than having a diet.

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been recommended
by doctors for having a
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healthy
life. The reason is that nutrition is the most
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important
part of our
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lives
and our health
is related
to this, they deem.
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, almost
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all of diseases
are curing through dietary ranging from the illnesses of internal organs to even organs of vision.
Therefore
,
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healthy
and special foods have been
being preferred
by humans for
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healthy
life.

On the other hand
,
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doing
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exercises
daily is more worthy for health needs of
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people
,
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because
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people
who always do training seems
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more younger
than they
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are and
they
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live
longer
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the key of this, as they said, their method. My grandfather tried
nearly
all types of sports and did them on time, he is continuing to do
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exercise
and
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now
he is 97 years
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old
,
nevertheless
he is
still
energetic
as a result
of his suitable position.
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So
, if someone wants to be
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healthy
, exercising is the best way to achieve his aim.

To sum up, there is a question that which one of the ways of being
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healthy
is high resulting and
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doing
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exercises
as well
as having a diet are
mostly
debating. The
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people
who prefer
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doing
body training are
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healthy
rather
than the supporters of dietary, I
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think
.
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IELTS essay “Some people believe that exercise is the key to good health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. ”

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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