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Write about the following topic: Some people advocate the death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society.Describe the advantages and disadvantages of the death penalty and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The rate of violence is increasing day by day in our society. It is creating several bad impacts on our youth, and on the next generations too. Therefore, a rule of death penalty has been set for committing any crime. Couple of people agree with the notion that a punish of death as a result of any violence is a great step. While, several people think that providing a death penalty to a criminal is unbearable. In my opinion, committing a sin should be prohibited by punishing the criminal. Nowadays, many of scandals have been rushed out in our society. This may includes robbery, cutting pockets, rapes, killing an innocence etc. The main reason behind all these sins are lack of education as well as not getting punished of what crime has been committed. Therefore, the criminal have no fear while heading to any type of sin. Advocating a strict punishment would be a right step to end such types of crimes in our society. The main primacy of this will be the end of every type of crimes. There would be a fear of punishment in everyone's mind so no one will have guts to commit a sin. There are instances where these criminals who have been sentenced to life imprisonment escape from prison and end up in society where they continue to commit their violence. Similarly, death penalty can lead to several drawbacks as well. Capital punishment should be discouraged because of the fact, that sometimes certain crimes are committed on impulse. Let’s take the case of a person who murders someone on impulse and instantly regrets his action. Maybe he committed the murder in a state of anger or some other strong emotion. While it is totally true that the person has committed murder and deserves to be punished seriously for his crime, it is sometimes too harsh to give such a person the death sentence considering the fact that the murder wasn’t planned. Unfortunately, in many places where the death penalty is practiced, a capital offence, whether it was committed on impulse or not, warrants a death sentence.
The rate of violence is increasing day by day in our
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society
. It is creating several
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bad
impacts on our youth, and on the
next
generations too.
Therefore
, a
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rule
of death
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penalty
has
been set
for committing any
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crime
. Couple of
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people
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agree
with the notion that a punish of death
as a result
of any violence is a great step. While, several
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people
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think
that providing a death
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penalty
to a criminal is unbearable. In my opinion, committing a
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sin
should
be prohibited
by punishing the criminal.

Nowadays,
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many
of scandals have
been rushed
out in our
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society
. This may includes robbery, cutting pockets, rapes, killing an innocence etc. The main reason behind all these
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sins
are lack of education
as well
as not getting punished of what
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crime
has been
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committed
.
Therefore
, the criminal have no fear while heading to any type of
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sin
. Advocating a strict punishment would be a right step to
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end
such types of
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crimes
in our
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society
. The main primacy of this will be the
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end
of every type of
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crimes
. There would be a fear of punishment in everyone's mind
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so
no one will have guts to commit a
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sin
. There are instances where these criminals who have
been sentenced
to life imprisonment escape from prison and
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end
up in
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society
where they continue to commit their violence.

Similarly
, death
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penalty
can lead to several drawbacks
as well
. Capital punishment should
be discouraged
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because
of the fact, that
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sometimes
certain
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crimes
are
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committed
on impulse.
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Let
’s take the case of a person who
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murders
someone on impulse and
instantly
regrets his action. Maybe he
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committed
the
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murder
in a state of anger or
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some
other strong emotion. While it is
totally
true that the person has
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committed
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murder
and deserves to
be punished
seriously
for his
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crime
, it is
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sometimes
too harsh to give such a person the death sentence considering the fact that the
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murder
wasn’t planned. Unfortunately, in
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many
places where the death
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penalty
is practiced
, a capital offence, whether it was
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committed
on impulse or not, warrants a death sentence.
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IELTS essay : Some people advocate the death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of the death penalty and give your opinion.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
352 words
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