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some believe elderly people should live in nursing home. others think they should live with the family members.discuss both the views and give your opinion.

some believe elderly people should live in nursing home. others think they should live with the family members. GMLXo
In this young days of millenium. It is highly debated issue topic that, grey haired people should live in old-age home whereas, other group of individual advocate that, they should live with their kith and kin. In my opinion, both the views have their own pros. Therefore, I shall put forth my arguements to support my views in the following paragaraphs. To begin with, the former idea there are myraid things to be shared in its favour, firstly, it is lucrative for retires to stay in nursing home as they live under expert care takers, because they have great benefit under better health care management. To explain with, in every retire home hospital with best doctors and dietician are available. Secondly many recreational activities are played by them in the senior citizen house, which tends to happy happy environment for them. For instance, according to previous news, more than 7 retire home do competition among them on every sunday as a joyful activity by playing several games. The latter view suggest that there is a common belief that old people should live with their family members, because they guide their grand children by describing their past experience stories as well as show best path for their enhancing future, however their presence is crucial in every home. For example, all decisions in many Indians family are being taken by either grandfather or grandmother in the house. Moreover, they are the thread which bound families all together with love and respect, resulting into strong brotherhood among them. To illustrate with, more than 70% of Indian family used to live as extended family. To recapitualate, though senior citizen home is not a real house, neverthless, it is lucrative as, it provides suitable enivornment and health facilities, respectively staying with the family have many merits for their young generation.
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highly
debated issue topic that,
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grey
haired
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in
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old
-age home whereas, other group of individual advocate that, they should
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live
with their kith and kin. In my opinion, both the views have their
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own
pros.
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, I shall put forth my
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arguements
to support my views in the following
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things to
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, it is lucrative for retires to stay in nursing home as they
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live
under expert care takers,
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because
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with, in every retire home hospital
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with best
doctors and
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dietician
are available.
Secondly
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many
recreational activities
are played
by them in the senior citizen
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house
, which tends to
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happy happy
environment for them.
For instance
, according to previous news, more than 7 retire home do competition among them on every
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sunday
as a joyful activity by playing several games. The latter view suggest that there is a common belief that
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old
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people
should
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live
with their
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family
members,
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because
they guide their grand children by describing their
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past experience
stories
as well
as
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show best
path for their enhancing future,
however
their presence is crucial in every home.
For example
, all decisions in
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many
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Indians
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family
are
being taken
by either grandfather or grandmother in the
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house
.
Moreover
, they are the thread which bound
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families
all together with
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love
and respect, resulting into strong brotherhood among them. To illustrate with, more than 70% of Indian
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family
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used
to
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live
as extended
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family
. To
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recapitualate
, though senior citizen home is not a real
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house
,
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neverthless
, it is lucrative as, it provides suitable
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enivornment
and health facilities,
respectively
staying with the
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family
have
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many
merits for their young generation.
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IELTS essay some believe elderly people should live in nursing home. others think they should live with the family members.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
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