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Selling fossils to private collectors

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Both reading and speaking discuss about the fossils that collectors have been selling. The reading claims that this action is not fair and the scientists and general people don’t have access to some certain fossils. However, the listening says that these claims is not true and they are exaggerating this action. Firstly, the reading passage states that due the fact that some fossilsare maintained in private houses, public people are not able to see them and they are suffering from it. In contrast, the professor rejects this point by saying that a lot of fossils are existence in museums for the people and saying this claim is far away from fairness. also she says that there are a lot of fossils in the schools for student and in other places to public people. Secondly, the reading passage states that because of lack of access to some fossils the scientists are not able to carry out their research on the fossils. On the other hand, the professor alters that this assertion is not a realistic one. she says that most of the scientist can get access to to the fossils and they are doing their research on them. finally, the reading says that the private collectors destroy some of the signs on the fossils and so the scientists no longer discover useful information from them and also in some case they deform the way the fossils were put in the ground or under the ground. In contrast, the professor says the scientists without paying attention to them are able to discover other fossils in the other region because according to professor's claim there are a lot of regains where no privet collectors go. also she says with being changed of place, the scientist can discover the needed information.
Both
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discuss about the
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fossils
that collectors have been selling. The
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reading
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claims
that this action is not
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fair
and the
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scientists
and general
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people
don’t have access to
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some
certain
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fossils
.
However
, the listening
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says
that these
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claims
is not
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true and
they are exaggerating this action.

Firstly
, the
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reading
passage states that due the fact that
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some
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fossilsare
maintained in private
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houses
, public
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people
are not able to
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see
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them and
they are suffering from it.
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, the professor rejects this point by saying that
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a lot of
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fossils
are existence in museums for the
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people
and saying this
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claim
is far away from fairness.
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also
she
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says
that there are
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fossils
in the schools for student and in
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other
places to public
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people
.

Secondly
, the
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passage states that
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because
of lack of access to
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some
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fossils
the
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scientists
are not able to carry out their research on the
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fossils
. On the
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other
hand, the professor alters that this assertion is not a realistic one.
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she
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says
that most of the
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scientist
can
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get
access
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to to
the
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fossils and
they are doing their research on them.

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finally
, the
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reading
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says
that the private collectors
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destroy
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some of the
signs on the
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fossils
and
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so
the
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scientists
no longer discover useful information from them and
also
in
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some
case they deform the way the
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fossils
were put
in the ground or under the ground.
In contrast
, the professor
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says
the
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scientists
without paying attention to them are able to discover
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other
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fossils
in the
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other
region
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because
according to professor's
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claim
there are
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a lot of
regains where no privet collectors go.
also
she
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says
with being
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changed
of place, the
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scientist
can discover the needed information.
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IELTS essay Selling fossils to private collectors

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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