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The reading passage is about some evidence that can be considered as a proof of animal self-awareness. It reviews the results of an experiment on chimpanzees, which is called Mark test. The lecturer brings about some flaws in those results that cast doubt on the conclusion, which is supported by the author of the passage. First of all, the lecturer mentions a consistency issue that makes the results of the Mark test unreliable. In a similar experiment on 11 cases, one of the chimps did not touch his face even once in a while. It seems that not all the test animals touch the marks on their faces while being exposed to their mirror image. Therefore, the passage claim that says more frequent facial manipulation in front of a mirror is because of self image recognition is refuted. Second, according to the lecturer, in another experiment one of the animals touched and rubbed the red marks off his face even before recovering from anesthesia. This showed that frequent touching can be independent of the presence of a mirror. Thus, the claim by the passage that a mirror leads to a higher number of face touching is rejected. Finally, the lecturer indicates that self-grooming and facial expressions are parts of normal social behaviors of chimpanzees. They do such things in front of their peers, the same way they do in front of a mirror. Thus, it cannot be concluded that self-grooming is a result of self-image recognition or a social norm among the chimps.
The reading passage is about
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some
evidence that can
be considered
as a proof of animal self-awareness. It reviews the
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results
of an experiment on chimpanzees, which
is called
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Mark
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test
. The
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lecturer
brings about
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some
flaws in those
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results
that cast doubt on the conclusion, which
is supported
by the author of the passage.

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First of all
, the
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lecturer
mentions a consistency issue that
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makes
the
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results
of the
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Mark
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test
unreliable. In a similar experiment on 11 cases, one of the chimps did not touch his
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face
even once in a while. It seems that not all the
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test
animals touch the
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marks
on their
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faces
while
being exposed
to their mirror image.
Therefore
, the passage claim that says more frequent facial manipulation in front of a mirror is
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because
of
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self image
recognition
is refuted
.

Second, according to the
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lecturer
, in another experiment one of the animals touched and rubbed the red
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marks
off his
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face
even
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before
recovering from anesthesia. This
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showed
that frequent touching can be independent of the presence of a mirror.
Thus
, the claim by the passage that a mirror leads to a higher number of
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face
touching
is rejected
.

Finally
, the
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lecturer
indicates that self-grooming and facial expressions are parts of normal social behaviors of chimpanzees. They do such things in front of their peers, the same way they do in front of a mirror.
Thus
, it cannot
be concluded
that self-grooming is a
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result
of self-image recognition or a social norm among the chimps.
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IELTS essay Self recognition

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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