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Present a written argument or case to an educated non-specialist audience on the following topic. Globalization has led to the introduction of many new international products into local shops and markets. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of this example of globalization?

Present a written argument or case to an educated non-specialist audience on the following topic. Globalization has led to the introduction of many new international products into local shops and markets. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of this example of globalization? aw96d
Globalization is among one of the key feature of the modern way of living. with the help of it, products these days have no boundaries. Like others, it also has merits and demerits as on one hand, it helps to reduce price and increase diversity among the products. On other hand, it damage the local shop owner and affects the people's job. To being with, the main advantages are increasing product variation and make it affordable. To elaborate, before globalization, there are limited products and very few choices to consumer before purchasing any product, but in recent time, the situation is completely apposite there are different international and national products that people have to choose from. Moreover, it also reduces the products' price tag and there are lots of varieties in the market, and there is no monopoly of a single company which results in high competitive price. For example, if we want to buy a mobile phone and there are hundreds of options, we have choice to buy a phone as per our convinces and budgets. Moving on the disadvantages, so it impact on local businesses and jobs. Globalization nearly shattered the local businesses and decline in the job vacancies. To simplify, International products are very advance and cheap as compare to local products. Local business organization not able to compete with international organization because of funds and advancement. Due to that people avert buying from local seller's and that nearly closed the shutter of local businesses. For instance, last year in my neighborhood a small spectacle manufacturing outlet was closed because of no sell and it made almost 50 employees jobless. To conclude, There are many advantages and disadvantages of globalization, but I personally believe that government should welcome the international products that is more beneficial, after carefully looking at our country interest and impact on local businesses.
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help
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products
these days have no boundaries. Like others, it
also
has merits and demerits as on one hand, it
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helps
to
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reduce
price and increase diversity among the
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products
. On other hand, it
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damage
the
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local
shop owner and affects the
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people
's job.

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being
with, the main advantages are increasing
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product
variation and
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make
it affordable. To elaborate,
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before
globalization, there
are limited
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products
and
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very
few choices to consumer
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before
purchasing any
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product
,
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but
in recent time, the situation is completely apposite there are
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different
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international
and national
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products
that
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people
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have to
choose from.
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, it
also
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reduces
the products' price tag and there are lots of
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the market, and there is no monopoly of a single
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company
which results in high competitive price.
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, if we want to
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buy
a mobile phone and there are hundreds of options, we have choice to
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buy
a phone as per our convinces and budgets.

Moving on the disadvantages,
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so
it
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impact
on
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local
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businesses
and jobs. Globalization
nearly
shattered the
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local
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businesses
and decline in the job vacancies. To simplify,
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International
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products
are
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very
advance and
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cheap
as compare to
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local
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products
.
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Local
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business
organization not able to compete with
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international
organization
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because
of funds and advancement. Due to that
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people
avert buying from
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local
seller's and that
nearly
closed the shutter of
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local
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businesses
.
For instance
, last year in my neighborhood a
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small
spectacle manufacturing outlet
was closed
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because
of no sell and it made almost 50 employees jobless.

To conclude
, There are
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many
advantages and disadvantages of globalization,
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but
I
personally
believe that
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government
should welcome the
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international
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products
that is
more beneficial, after
carefully
looking at our country interest and impact on
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local
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businesses
.
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IELTS essay Present a written argument or case to an educated non-specialist audience on the following topic. Globalization has led to the introduction of many new international products into local shops and markets. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of this example of globalization?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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