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People who cause their own illnesses through unhealthy lifestyles and poor diets should have to pay more for health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

People who are following a bad habitat in their lives and have been unaware irresponsible on their meals must pay more for their remedy. In my opinion, I disagree with this statement because many reasons which I will be mention through this essay, and the problem could be happened in terms if the costs be more to pay for those kind of people. At the same time, I have other punishment that I believe be useful without damaging or causing any issues in society. First of all, our duty is remedies that people without any condition and any other higher price although their situation on their lives or their habitats, or if they have a wealth health routine lives or not. We can let these people be aware in their daily routine habits through take apart on a higher a price in their junk food, cigarettes and on their time that spend it without exercising. For example, pay a bell as 30 dollars if not walking 30 minutes daily, so just to encourage people to walk. Secondly, if we higher cost of the treatment maybe will be faced economic issues that cause to poverty level, and terms to be many people pass away because they can not sustain those costs of the treatment of a hospital. However, the ideas of increase number of the costs of the remedy are for being people responsible on their lives, but this is not a right punishment. In conclusion, we have to treatment every people in the world instead if they care on not for their lives, because is our duty, we have been mentioned solution could resolve to be people responsibility on their lives. And finally we are noticed what can be happened if we had been applying that pay more for remedies

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 who are following a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
 habitat in their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
 and have been unaware irresponsible on their meals This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 pay more for their remedy.  In my opinion,Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace 
I disagree with this statement This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
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many
 reasons which I will be The past participle is required after “will be”.mentioned
mention
 through this essay, and the problem could be happened
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those kind
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people
.  At the same time,Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace 
I have other punishment that I believe be useful without damaging or causing any issues in society.

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First of all
, our duty is remedies that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
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lives
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lives
 or not.  We can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
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people
 be aware in their daily routine habits through take apart on a higher a price in their junk food,Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace 
cigarettes and on their time that spend it without exercising.  For example,Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace 
pay a bell as 30 dollars if not walking 30 minutes daily, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 to encourage This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 to walk.

Secondly
, if It seems that a verb or adverb is missing or misspelled here. Please verify.
we higher
 cost of the treatment maybe will be faced
 economic issues that cause to poverty level, and terms to be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 pass away This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they can not sustain those costs of the treatment of a hospital.  However
, the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtsconceptsnotions
ideas
 of increase number of the costs of the remedy are for being This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 responsible on their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 this is not a right punishment.

In conclusion,Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace 
we have to treatment every This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 in the world instead
 if they care on not for their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 is our duty,Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace 
we have been mentioned
 solution could resolve to be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 responsibility on their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
.  And finally
 we are noticed
 what can be happened
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