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ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? AjBDw
When television was a rare commodity in everyone's home, We probably had one or more Media channels that predominantly concentrate only on national and International news. With technology improving drastically and many multi national companies starting to invest more, Beginning a national media channel is not as difficult as it was earlier. We could also see people beginning their career in media by creating You tube channels, post lots of videos in it, talk about controversial topics, gain popularity, trend those topics in the social media to get more reach and also earn through the number of views. We have plenty of You tube channels and more number of television channels than it was before a decade. Anything from anywhere can be captured or recorded via smart phones and it can be shared immediately to everyone with just a click. So, the word privacy has gone for a toss in recent years. If we people worry about privacy, Think of celebrities and famous people in the country. It is difficult that their every movement is recorded. Imagine someone watching you right from the moment you step outside your home and continue following you throughout. Noticing who comes and goes to your home, cook up stories based on that, post it as an entertainment news or share in a You tube channel and gain popularity. Does it sound so awkward? well, that is what happening in many countries these days after the advent of technologies. Famous people became popular because they did things which many afraid to do, would have worked hard from their young age to be in a position where they are now. So, Media constantly targeting their privacy just because they could make some news out of it, is unacceptable. They cannot interfere in anybody's personal affair. After all, popular people in our country are also humans. We should respect their feelings as well. I have seen media questioning about their private relationship in public. It is completely unfair and it is an individual's choice. Just because they are famous, Media should not take them for granted and share fake news to the public to gain attention. To conclude, Everyone should be given some private space and their feelings should be respected irrespective of whether they are famous or not. Technology is to improve our lives, not to misuse it and deteriorate it further.
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probably
had one or more
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channels
that
predominantly
concentrate
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only
on national and International
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news
. With technology improving
drastically
and
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multi national
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starting to invest more, Beginning a national
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media
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channel
is not as difficult as it was earlier. We could
also
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see
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people
beginning their career in
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media
by creating
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You tube
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channels
, post lots of videos in it, talk about controversial topics, gain popularity, trend those topics in the social
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media
to
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get
more reach and
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earn through the number of views.

We have
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of
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You tube
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channels
and more number of television
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channels
than it was
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before
a decade. Anything from anywhere can
be captured
or recorded via smart phones and it can
be shared
immediately to everyone with
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just
a click.
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, the word privacy has gone for a toss in recent years.

If we
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worry about privacy,
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of celebrities and
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famous
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people
in the country. It is difficult that their every movement
is recorded
. Imagine someone
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watching
you right from the moment you step outside your home and continue following you throughout. Noticing who
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comes
and goes to your home, cook up stories based on that, post it as an entertainment
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news
or share in a
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You tube
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channel
and gain popularity. Does it sound
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awkward?
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,
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what happening in
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countries these days after the advent of technologies.

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people
became popular
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they did things which
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afraid to do, would have worked
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from their young age to be in a position where they are
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now
.
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,
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constantly
targeting their privacy
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they could
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out of it, is unacceptable. They cannot interfere in anybody's personal affair.
After all
, popular
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people
in our country are
also
humans. We should respect their feelings
as well
.

I have
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seen
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media
questioning about their private relationship in public. It is completely unfair and it is an individual's choice.
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Just
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because
they are
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famous
,
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Media
should not take them for granted and share fake
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news
to the public to gain attention.

To conclude
, Everyone should be
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given
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some
private space and their feelings should
be respected
irrespective of whether they are
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famous
or not. Technology is to
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improve
our
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lives
, not to misuse it and deteriorate it
further
.
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IELTS essay ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life?

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
396 words
6.0
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