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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. BGXj
Compared to the past decade influence of media programs are very vital in our daily life as well as our decision making process. Most of the media programs currently pay attention to issues and disasters instead of growth. Few persons think it is dangerous to individuals and to the society and I totally agree with this point of view and I will explain why I reach to this view in the following essay. World is progressing too swiftly and without constructive improvement across all areas, it is too difficult to catch us with other citizens and societies around globe. Positive development is a long term process, and this includes improvement in infrastructure, education, science and other key areas but problems and emergencies are short term concerns. Once government and authorities divert their attention to disasters instead of positive development the growth of the country can be halted. A recent report from Unites Nations is clearly explaining the same scenario that many developing countries in African continent are only focused on short term crisis rather than long term growth and this is affecting their competitiveness against majority of other countries. Another important point to consider the financial interests of media companies because their major focus is to make financial gain rather than focus on the necessities of the societies. Cognitive development is a long term slow process and in the current world people are not interested on this, instead they are curious to know what happening today. So, newspapers, television and radio companies will not get viewers and subscribers if they start prompting long terms progressing plans because of this they automatically divert as per their spectators interests. For example in recent years many traditional television and news papers got closed and many new comers with no social values gain the market. They may divert everyone’s vision in to short term problems to gain their interests and this can damage everyone in a long run. Based on the arguments outlined above I strongly believe focusing only on issues and emergencies is harmful to everyone, instead media should focus more on positive development.
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programs are
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vital in our daily life
as well
as our
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decision making
process. Most of the
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media
programs
currently
pay attention to issues and disasters
instead
of growth. Few persons
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think
it is
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dangerous
to individuals and to the society and I
totally
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agree
with this point of view and I will
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explain
why I reach to this view in the following essay.

World is progressing too
swiftly
and without constructive improvement across all areas, it is too difficult to catch us with other citizens and societies around globe.
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Positive
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development
is a
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long
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term
process, and this includes improvement in infrastructure, education, science and other key areas
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but
problems and emergencies are short
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term
concerns. Once
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government
and authorities divert their attention to disasters
instead
of
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positive
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development
the growth of the country can
be halted
. A recent report from Unites Nations is
clearly
explaining the same scenario that
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many
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developing countries
in African continent are
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only
focused on short
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term
crisis
rather
than
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long
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term
growth and this is affecting their competitiveness against
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majority of
other countries.

Another
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important
point to consider the financial interests of
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media
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companies
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because
their major focus is to
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make
financial gain
rather
than focus on the necessities of the societies. Cognitive
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development
is a
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long
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term
slow process and in the
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current
world
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people
are not interested on this,
instead
they are curious to know what happening
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today
.
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So
, newspapers, television and radio
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companies
will not
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get
viewers and subscribers if they
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start
prompting
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long
terms progressing plans
because of this
they
automatically
divert as per their spectators interests.
For example
in recent years
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many
traditional television and
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news papers
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got
closed and
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many
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new comers
with no social values gain the market. They may divert everyone’s vision in to short
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term
problems to gain their interests and this can damage everyone in a
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long
run.

Based on the arguments outlined above I
strongly
believe focusing
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only
on issues and emergencies is harmful to everyone,
instead
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media
should focus more on
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positive
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development
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
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