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Nowadays, students are migrating to foreign countries for further education. Is it a positive trend or a negative?

Nowadays, students are migrating to foreign countries for further education. Is it a positive trend or a negative? pRa5d
In the era of globalization, millions of students are crossing the boundaries of their countries with the purpose of acquiring further education. Though many academicians and so-called educated people vociferously oppose the concept of foreign education on account of the dangers involved in landing on unfamiliar land, I partially disagree with this view. I also reserve some arguments to refute this view. First and foremost reason for advocating the concept of study oversees is a global exposure it gives to the learners. Holding an international degree provides a global recognition as well as a wider range of opportunities for employment. In other words, it booms employability so students do not have to struggle for survival in the global competitive market. Another major factor which fascinates me to support further education in abroad is that studying in another country brings so many positive aspects to the students themselves. Firstly, by studying in a new country, students have a chance to learn new languages and new cultures. Secondly, students will learn about how to live independently, like clean their own rooms or doing the laundry by themselves. Lastly, they could make new friends with people from other countries and get familiar with multicultural environment. And these are the reasons, students can feel a thrill in learning on foreign soil because they find different lifestyle, food, and dressing which can help them to overcome the problem of nostalgia. On the other hand, migrating to the other land sometimes invites many threats which make their life harder. Besides this, an expensive education which compels them to do a part-time job which many times result into distraction from study. In a nutshell, foreign education can undoubtedly be a greater challenge for an individual if a student is not dedicated towards his future career. But, in my opinion, uncountable merits of foreign study outweigh its disadvantages.
In the era of globalization, millions of
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students
are crossing the boundaries of their
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countries
with the purpose of acquiring
further
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education
. Though
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many
academicians and
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so
-called educated
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people
vociferously
oppose the concept of
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foreign
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education
on account of the
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dangers
involved in landing on unfamiliar land, I
partially
disagree with this view. I
also
reserve
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some
arguments to refute this view.

First
and foremost reason for advocating the concept of study oversees is a global exposure it gives to the learners. Holding an international degree provides a global recognition
as well
as a wider range of opportunities for employment. In
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other
words, it booms employability
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so
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students
do not
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have to
struggle for survival in the global competitive market.

Another major factor which fascinates me to support
further
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education
in abroad is that studying in another
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country
brings
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so
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many
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positive
aspects to the
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students
themselves.
Firstly
, by studying in a
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new
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country
,
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students
have a chance to learn
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new
languages and
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new
cultures.
Secondly
,
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students
will learn about how to
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live
independently
, like clean their
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own
rooms or doing the laundry by themselves.
Lastly
, they could
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make
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new
friends with
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people
from
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other
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countries
and
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get
familiar with multicultural environment. And these are the reasons,
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students
can feel a thrill in learning on
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foreign
soil
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because
they find
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different
lifestyle, food, and dressing which can
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help
them to overcome the problem of nostalgia.

On the
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other
hand, migrating to the
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other
land
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sometimes
invites
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many
threats which
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make
their life harder.
Besides
this, an expensive
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education
which compels them to do a part-time job which
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many
times result into distraction from study.

In a nutshell,
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foreign
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education
can
undoubtedly
be a greater challenge for an individual if a
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student
is not dedicated towards his future career.
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But
, in my opinion, uncountable merits of
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foreign
study outweigh its disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, students are migrating to foreign countries for further education. Is it a positive trend or a negative?

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5 paragraphs
310 words
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