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Nowadays people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Internet has global uses and it is a very common way of communication all over the world. In the modern era, individuals use forum to communicate each other from different parts of world, and they aware of the situations happening around them. This essay will highlight the main pros and cons of internet community and argue that merits far exceeds than demerits. On one hand, many people could be addicted, if they spend long hours on forum, while criminals would take advantage of accessing internet. This is due to the fact that internet is a network which can be accessible from anywhere and throughout the world. For example, youtube, whatsapp, instagram as well as twitter are the main platforms on which people spend more time. Moreover, many fake websites are present on the internet and innocent people believe them and spend their valuable money. As a result, people depends on internet for their needs. On the other hand, if people communicate each other on internet, relationship could be better, also they aware of global news which helps them to increase their knowledge. This could be because people have no time to visit far places. For instance, my friend live in village, then it is not possible to visit every day and talk, due to the internet I could talk him regularly. Hence, with the help of internet people interact with each other and also develop knowledge skills. To conclude, forum has many benefits because it is a global network. However, these days, with the help of internet individuals can interact with each other and aware of global news. Forum provides people to communicate each other regularly and to excel in knowledge they have.
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social media to
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keep
in touch with others and be
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aware
of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Internet has
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global
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uses and
it is a
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very
common way of communication all over the world. In the modern era, individuals
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use
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forum
to communicate each
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other
from
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different
parts of world, and they
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aware
of the situations happening around them. This essay will highlight the main pros and cons of internet community and argue that merits far exceeds than demerits.

On one hand,
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many
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people
could
be addicted
, if they spend long hours on
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forum
, while criminals would take advantage of accessing internet.
This is due to the fact that
internet is a network which can be accessible from anywhere and throughout the world.
For example
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youtube
,
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whatsapp
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instagram
as well
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twitter
are the main platforms on which
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people
spend more time.
Moreover
,
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many
fake websites are present on the internet and innocent
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people
believe them and spend their valuable money.
As a result
,
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people
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depends
on internet for their needs.

On the
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other
hand, if
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people
communicate each
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other
on internet, relationship could be better,
also
they
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aware
of
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global
news which
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helps
them to increase their knowledge. This could be
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because
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people
have no time to visit far places.
For instance
, my friend
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live
in village, then it is not possible to visit every day and talk, due to the internet I could talk him
regularly
.
Hence
, with the
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help
of internet
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people
interact with each
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other
and
also
develop knowledge
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skills
.

To conclude
,
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forum
has
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many
benefits
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because
it is a
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global
network.
However
, these days, with the
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help
of internet individuals can interact with each
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other
and
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aware
of
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global
news.
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Forum
provides
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people
to communicate each
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other
regularly
and to excel in knowledge they have.
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IELTS essay Nowadays people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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