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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed? 6Eex
Today people prefer to be their own boss rather than working for someone else. This shift in mindset could be accounted to the fact that slaving for another organisation doesn't provide satisfaction in the longer run. The reasons for people starting their own business are multi-fold. The major reason is the freedom to work anytime anywhere is exhilarating. Pursuing your own passion generates tremendous amount of pleasure in contrast to being an employee to someone else and helping them achieve their dream. Additionally, being self-employed has its perks. The elements such as reporting to higher authorities, following orders as well as the timeline are not present when someone works for themselves. Furthermore, Business owners have the choice to invest their time and energy into the areas important to them. Working 9-5 and over-timing seems dreading when an individual isn't enjoying what they are doing, instead grinding for your own vision is far more fruitful than doing so for someone else. On the other hand, becoming self-employed has its downside too. Firstly, starting a business requires funds and support from other parties, which is difficult to attain. Investors require proof of security which is hard to provide at an early stage. Secondly, one has to do everything by themselves. Moreover, building your own firm involves risk of failures and losses. Since they are inevitable, it is necessary to develop a thick skin in order to get past the hurdles and become successful. Lastly, in times like these, there is very little support from family and friends. Leaving a job with steady income is an idea most people, especially family members, can't digest. A regular salary is assuring to support a family hence the transition from a job to business is quite overwhelming one. To conclude, working for yourself is always amazing but there are certain risks involved which need to be assessed. Researching, collecting all the facts, learning from other pupils mistakes and having a backup is important while jumping into this trend.
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people
prefer to be their
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own
boss
rather
than working for
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someone
else. This shift in mindset could
be accounted
to the fact that slaving for another
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organisation
doesn't provide satisfaction in the longer run.

The reasons for
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people
starting their
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own
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business
are multi-fold. The major reason is the freedom to work anytime anywhere is exhilarating. Pursuing your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
passion generates tremendous amount of pleasure
in contrast
to being an employee to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
someone
else and helping them achieve their dream.
Additionally
, being self-employed has its perks. The elements such as reporting to higher authorities, following orders
as well
as the timeline are not present when
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someone
works for themselves.
Furthermore
,
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Business
owners have the choice to invest their time and energy into the areas
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important
to them. Working 9-5 and over-timing seems dreading when an individual isn't enjoying what they are doing,
instead
grinding for your
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own
vision is far more fruitful than doing
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so
for
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someone
else.

On the other hand
, becoming self-employed has its downside too.
Firstly
, starting a
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business
requires funds and support from other parties, which is difficult to attain. Investors require proof of security which is
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hard
to provide at an early stage.
Secondly
, one
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has to
do everything by themselves.
Moreover
, building your
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own
firm involves
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risk
of failures and losses. Since they are inevitable, it is necessary to develop a thick skin in order to
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get
past the hurdles and become successful.
Lastly
, in times like these, there is
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very
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little
support from family and friends. Leaving a job with steady income is an
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idea
most
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people
,
especially
family members, can't digest. A regular salary is assuring to support a family
hence
the transition from a job to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
is quite overwhelming one.

To conclude
, working for yourself is always amazing
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but
there are certain
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risks
involved which need to
be assessed
. Researching, collecting all the facts, learning from other pupils mistakes and having a backup is
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important
while jumping into this trend.
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IELTS essay Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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4 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
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