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Most societies has its homeless people Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money

It is important to consider how to help the homeless people who are living on the streets miserably. Although some people believe that supporting them with money is the best possible solution, I disagree with this view. In my opinion, giving monetary help to the homeless would make the situation only worse as it has the chance to make them more dependent on people’s generosity. Donating money to the homeless will do more harm than any good. This is because, it usually acts as an excuse for them to earn money through hardship, which might turn them into being more lazy and dependent. In other words, they would consider this as an easy opportunity to earn money and would likely to stay homeless forever rather than utilizing this money for their betterment. For instance, a vast majority of people living on the streets are capable of doing manual works, but instead of achieving money by working hard, they only want to live on donation. Moreover, if government decides to subsidize them, then the people, who are already struggling to make their ends meet, will abandon the hopes of becoming self-sufficient. Consequently, supporting them with money would have an adverse effect on these homeless people. Apart from just giving money, there are other effective ways by which we can come in assistance of homeless peoples. One of them is to provide vocational training. The reason for this is that they would be able to gather experience by doing this, which would not only enable them to apply for a job but also give them the chance to buy a house with their hard-earned money. For example, Bangladesh government has undertaken a programme to give hand-on training on handy crafts and mechanics to unemployed people so that they can earn their livelihood after this course. Therefore, this action has been able to aid the homeless people to a great extent. To conclude, it is not hard to see that giving financial benefits to homeless people do not help them in the long run. I think the better option would be to train them for making themselves useful instead of leeching on to other people’s support.
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who are living on the streets
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some
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believe that supporting them with
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is the best possible solution, I disagree with this view. In my opinion, giving monetary
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help
to the
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would
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make
the situation
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only
worse as it has the chance to
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make
them more dependent on
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people’s
generosity.

Donating
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money
to the
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homeless
will do more harm than any
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good
. This is
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because
, it
usually
acts as an excuse for them to earn
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money
through hardship, which might turn them into being more lazy and dependent.
In other words
, they would consider this as an easy opportunity to earn
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money
and would likely to stay
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homeless
forever
rather
than utilizing this
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money
for their betterment.
For instance
, a vast majority of
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people
living on the streets are capable of doing manual works,
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but
instead
of achieving
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money
by working
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hard
, they
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only
want to
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live
on donation.
Moreover
, if
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government
decides to subsidize them, then the
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people
, who are already struggling to
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make
their ends
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meet
, will abandon the hopes of becoming self-sufficient.
Consequently
, supporting them with
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money
would have an adverse effect on these
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homeless
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people
.

Apart from
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just
giving
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money
, there are other effective ways by which we can
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come
in assistance of
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homeless
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peoples
. One of them is to provide vocational training.
The reason for this is
that they would be able to gather experience by doing this, which would not
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only
enable them to apply for a job
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but
also
give them the chance to
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buy
a
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house
with their
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hard
-earned
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money
.
For example
, Bangladesh
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government
has undertaken a
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programme
to give hand-on training on handy crafts and mechanics to unemployed
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people
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so
that they can earn their livelihood after this course.
Therefore
, this action has been able to aid the
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homeless
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people
to a great extent.

To conclude
, it is not
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hard
to
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see
that giving financial benefits to
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homeless
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people
do not
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help
them in the long run. I
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think
the better option would be to train them for making themselves useful
instead
of leeching on to other
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people’s
support.
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IELTS essay Most societies has its homeless people Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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