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More and more people are moving from rural areas to cities in search of a batter life. But my city has its own problems. What are problems? Suggest some solutions.

At the present time, people are moving from rural areas to cities for a batter lifestyle. However, in this essay i will discuss some problems as well as solutions. First and foremost, in urban areas there are such problems which creates lots of trouble for people for instance, the population rate has increased at large scale therefore, there are least houses which are also really expensive in such a situation people force to move suburbs sides. Secondly, the traffic problem is also major problem in cities areas there are no any rules and regulations for traffic systems so that why traffic get always jam during morning and evenings time. The last but not least, the other problem which also people face that is water pollution and air pollution these problems create various kind of health issues which gradually damage human life's. However, despite of these problems there are also some solutions which can overcome on these issues. First of all, government should consider seriously on these issues they should provide a number of houses to their public in cheap rate so that people don't have to worry about any kind of houses problems. In addition, government should make a number of strict rules for traffic system for instance, must wide roads and implement fine on those citizens who not follow traffic policies. Besides, government must supply pure water to public and take some measures which may decrease air pollution for example, all fuel factories which discharges fumes in environment that are should build far away from cities thus, provides such vehicles which discharge less fumes. Consequently, when these all problems get solve then people will can live a peaceful life. From my perspective, mostly people move to cities areas for batter life, and they try to give all facilities to their families but when they face such kind of problems then they can maintain a good balance between their lives and work. To sum up, the eradication these problems are really essential because without solve these problems this world people will not get success.
At the present time,
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are moving from rural
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cities
for a batter lifestyle.
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will discuss
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problems
as well
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and foremost, in urban
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areas
there are such
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problems
which creates lots of trouble for
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people
for instance
, the population rate has increased at large scale
therefore
, there are
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least
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houses
which are
also
really
expensive in such a situation
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people
force to
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move
suburbs sides.
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, the
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traffic
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problem
is
also
major
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problem
in
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cities
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areas
there are
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no
any
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rules
and regulations for
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traffic
systems
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so
that why
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traffic
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always jam during morning and evenings time. The last
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not least, the other
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problem
which
also
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people
face
that is
water pollution and air pollution these
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problems
create various kind of health issues which
gradually
damage human life's.
However
,
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despite of
these
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problems
there are
also
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some
solutions which can overcome on these issues.

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First of all
,
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government
should consider
seriously
on these issues they should provide a number of
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houses
to their public in
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cheap
rate
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so
that
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people
don't
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have to
worry about any kind of
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houses
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problems
.
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,
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government
should
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make
a number of strict
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rules
for
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traffic
system
for instance
,
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must
wide roads and implement fine on those citizens who not follow
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traffic
policies.
Besides
,
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government
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must
supply pure water to public and take
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some
measures which may decrease air pollution
for example
, all fuel factories which discharges fumes in environment that are should build far away from
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cities
thus
, provides such vehicles which discharge
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less
fumes.
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, when these all
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problems
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get
solve then
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people
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will can
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live
a peaceful life.

From my perspective,
mostly
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people
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move
to
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cities
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areas
for batter life, and they try to give all facilities to their families
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but
when they face such kind of
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problems
then they can maintain a
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good
balance between their
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lives
and work.

To sum up, the eradication these
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problems
are
really
essential
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because
without solve these
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problems
this world
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people
will not
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get
success.
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IELTS essay More and more people are moving from rural areas to cities in search of a batter life. But my city has its own problems. What are problems? Suggest some solutions.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
344 words
5.5
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