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Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to and exchange of information. Far from being beneficial, this is a danger to our societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to and exchange of information. Far from being beneficial, this is a danger to our societies. WpAe
Nowadays, a significant breakthrough in the technologies' growth has brought to humanity easier way to obtain the needed information and spread it as rapid as one click, However, it as considered that this trend is hazardous for humankind, although, I would argue about this statement that drawbacks exceed advantages. From one hand, the technology integration has taken our lives to a new more convenient way. Due to the fact that changes such as the internet development have diversified our daily routine including increased population's literacy. For instance, education has become available to nation, especially for individuals who live on remote areas without necessity to move to larger cities for pursue a profession. Another example is now we can transfer money whenever we need to. Moreover, we are able to control our expenses by using application the bank providing to us, its created interest in providing a high data security. All these facilities save time and effort. From the other hand, the technology modernization has formed a higher unemployment rate due to the fact of unnecessary number of working places. Employees prefer on automated process than manual labor. In addition, there are a few of adverse reasons. For example, personal details leak which has led to an increase in electronic fraud, consequently, people up to now unaware how to cope with hyper crime. Apart from criminal the phone's addiction has taken off a result person become antisocial. To conclude, although I believe modern technology is immensely beneficial, it has its aspects that mankind should take into account and remedy its problems.
Nowadays, a significant breakthrough in the technologies' growth has brought to humanity easier way to obtain the needed information and spread it as rapid as one click,
However
, it as considered that this trend is hazardous for humankind, although, I would argue about this statement that drawbacks exceed advantages.

From one hand, the technology integration has taken our
lives
to a new more convenient way. Due to the fact that
changes
such as the internet development have diversified our daily routine including increased population's literacy.
For instance
, education has become available to nation,
especially
for individuals who
live
on remote areas without necessity to
move
to larger cities for pursue a profession. Another example is
now
we can transfer money whenever we need to.
Moreover
, we are able to control our expenses by using application the bank providing to us, its created interest in providing a high data security. All these facilities save time and effort.

From the other hand, the technology modernization has formed a higher unemployment rate due to the fact of unnecessary number of working places. Employees prefer on automated process than manual labor.
In addition
, there are a few of adverse reasons.
For example
, personal
details
leak which has led to an increase in electronic fraud,
consequently
,
people
up to
now
unaware how to cope with hyper crime. Apart from criminal the phone's addiction has taken off a result person become antisocial.

To conclude
, although I believe modern technology is
immensely
beneficial, it has its aspects that mankind should take into account and remedy its problems.
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IELTS essay Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to and exchange of information. Far from being beneficial, this is a danger to our societies.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
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