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Moblie phones and internet can be of great use for elderly. In what ways these are helpful to them ,? How we can encourage them to use it in an advanced way.

Moblie phones and internet can be of great use for elderly. In what ways these are helpful to them, ? How we can encourage them to use it in an advanced way. 8dp7m
it is generally considered that, in modern era technology has Paramount role in individuals life to get knowledge around the globe. it is deemed by few sections of society that cell phones and world wide Web could be of better utilize for old age people this treatise will examine how mobile phones are useful for elder individual and how masses can motivate them to use it in detail and provide evidences related to universal phenomenon. Apparently, it is mainly determined that, there are multiple farious contribute factors that why cellular phones and internet are essential for older people. The predominant reason behind is that, cell phones has a lot of benefits. senior citizens can take more benefits from phone as well as they can easily do video chatting with their child. Most of the older persons pay their electric, water and medical bills through internet which has made thier life easier and convenient. Apart from it, elder human can live a libral life with the help of mobile phones. There are lots of social apps available such as, google pay, Whatsapp, Instagram and so on. The older people can utilize these apps and they can accomplished their work at a time. For example, the survey was conducted by the time of newspaper in India, showed that 60%of urban area people are getting the more benefits through the cellular phone. Nevertheless, Do you think phones play significant role in elder people life? Certainly yes, there are many aspects that are associated with this issue. Chiefly, children should encourage to their older person how they can use cell phones. Youngsters should give a training to their senior citizens if they can live standard of life in their society as well as when individual will give more preference to cellular phone then they can fulfill their all requirements and they do not confront any difficulty in future As a result, the majority of modern generation who motivate to their guardian how moblie phone is helpful for them. In conclusion, there is no denying fact that, it can be advocated that phones and internet have important role. senior individual can get a knowledge about what is happening all around their world. However, childern should always influence to thier parents.
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knowledge around the globe.
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world wide Web
could be of better utilize for
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old
age
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people
this treatise will examine how mobile
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phones
are useful for elder
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individual
and how masses can motivate them to
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use
it in detail and provide evidences related to universal phenomenon.

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farious
contribute factors that why cellular
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phones
and internet are essential for
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older
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people
. The predominant reason behind is that, cell
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phones
has
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a lot of
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senior
citizens can take more benefits from
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phone
as well
as they can
easily
do video chatting with their child. Most of the
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older
persons pay their electric, water and medical bills through internet which has made
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easier and convenient. Apart from it, elder human can
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. There are lots of social apps available such as,
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,
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, Instagram and
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older
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can utilize these
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apps and
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showed
that 60%of urban area
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are getting the more benefits through the cellular phone.

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phones
play significant role in elder
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?
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Chiefly
, children should encourage to their
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person how they can
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cell
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. Youngsters should give a training to their senior citizens if they can
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in their society
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will give more preference to cellular
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phone
then they can fulfill their all
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requirements and
they do not confront any difficulty in future
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, the majority of modern generation who motivate to their guardian how
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moblie
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phone
is helpful for them.

In conclusion
, there is no denying fact that, it can
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that
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phones
and internet have
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important
role.
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senior
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can
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get
a knowledge about what is happening all around their world.
However
,
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parents.
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IELTS essay Moblie phones and internet can be of great use for elderly. In what ways these are helpful to them, ? How we can encourage them to use it in an advanced way.

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