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Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting.

Parental responsibilities and roles are very important for the parents to make their children prepared for the future. The way a father or mother treats a child affects greatly for his/her future growth both mentally and physically. If parents fail to take great care of their children, then those children might go astray and will claim their parents for their misfortune. Every mother and father love his or her children more than anything in this world and they expect them to be great persons and well established in future. Throughout the human history, mothers mainly take care of the children and do most of the works for the children. On the contrary, men are mainly busy outside the home to earn the living for the whole family. This is not to say that men are not of importance in children caring and they do not know their kids. They are most necessary if children are to appreciate fully the roles of both sexes. But women have proven themselves superior parents as a result of their condition, their less aggressive natures and they are generally better to communicate with kids. Men remain busy at their works and have to stay outside the home most of the time, but women have lots of spare times to share with their children. From the time they are little girls, females learn about nurturing. First with dolls and later perhaps with younger brothers and sisters; girls are given the role of career. Girls see their mothers in the same roles and so it is natural that they identify this as a female activity. Boys, in contrast, learn competitive roles far removed from what it means to nurture. While boys may dream of adventures, girls' conditioning means they tend to see the future in terms of raising families. Girls also appear to be less aggressive than boys. In adulthood, it is men, not women, who prove to be the aggressors in crime and in war. Obviously, in raising children, a more patient, gentle manner is preferable than a more aggressive one. Although there certainly exists gentlemen and aggressive women, by and large, females are less likely to resort to violence in attempting to solve problems. But if we consider that all women are good for their children and men can not raise a kid properly then perhaps it would be a partial judgment. Is not there any family where the mother has died or not present and it is the father who takes care of the children as well as does jobs outside? Certainly, there are lots. In third world countries, fathers are comparatively more educated than the mothers and the take care of their children's education greatly. A child needs the affection and caring of both father and mother.
Parental responsibilities and
roles
are
very
important
for the
parents
to
make
their
children
prepared for the
future
. The way a
father
or
mother
treats a child affects
greatly
for his/her
future
growth both mentally and
physically
. If
parents
fail to take great
care
of their
children
, then those
children
might go astray and will claim their
parents
for their misfortune. Every
mother
and
father
love
his or her
children
more than anything in this
world and
they
expect
them to be great persons and well established in
future
. Throughout the human history, mothers
mainly
take
care
of the
children
and do most of the works for the
children
.
On the contrary
,
men
are
mainly
busy outside the home to earn the living for the whole family. This is not to say that
men
are not of importance in
children
caring and
they do not know their kids. They are
most
necessary if
children
are to appreciate
fully
the
roles
of both sexes.
But
women
have proven themselves superior
parents
as a result
of their condition, their less
aggressive
natures and
they are
generally
better to communicate with kids.
Men
remain busy at their works and
have to
stay outside the home most of the time,
but
women
have lots of spare times to share with their
children
. From the time they are
little
girls
, females learn about nurturing.
First
with dolls and later perhaps with younger brothers and sisters;
girls
are
given
the
role
of career.
Girls
see
their mothers in the same
roles
and
so
it is natural that they identify this as a female activity. Boys,
in contrast
, learn competitive
roles
far removed from what it means to nurture. While boys may dream of adventures, girls' conditioning means they tend to
see
the
future
in terms of raising families.
Girls
also
appear to be less
aggressive
than boys. In adulthood, it is
men
, not
women
, who prove to be the aggressors in crime and in war.
Obviously
, in raising
children
, a more patient, gentle manner is preferable than a more
aggressive
one. Although there
certainly
exists gentlemen and
aggressive
women
, by and large, females are less likely to resort to violence in attempting to solve problems.

But
if we consider that all
women
are
good
for their
children
and
men
can not raise a kid
properly
then perhaps it would be a partial judgment. Is not there any family where the
mother
has
died
or not
present and
it is the
father
who takes
care
of the
children
as well
as does jobs outside?
Certainly
, there are lots. In third world countries,
fathers
are
comparatively
more educated than the mothers and the take
care
of their children's education
greatly
. A child needs the affection and caring of both
father
and
mother
.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting.

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464 words
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