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Many people believe that global environmental problems should be dealt with internationally rather than domestically. What is your opinion?

There is no denying that environmental issues have become extremely serious in the last decades and has been discussed by different sectors from our society. Some experts say these problems should be solved as an international matter. Other people say every country should deal with its own environmental issues. I strongly tend to agree with the former. From my standpoint, a single problem here could affect the whole world. One major and crescent concern is related to deforestation, and we could take as an example Amazon Forest, which has been incredibly burnt since last year. The entire planet needs this forest in order to have oxygen to breathe. Consequently, every country should be concerned about Amazon issues and discuss how to combat the crimes that have occurred over there. Another concern is about animals which are endangered and need assistance to survive. When an animal becomes extinct is the world that loses it. For this reason, this matter has to be dealt with internationally. Moreover, every single animal is essential for biodiversity and human being needs them to be alive. Finally, another problem is the global warming that has been affected all of us. To illustrated, the ices that have been melted in the Antarctic have impacted the sea level worldwide. Moreover, this is a consequence of several issues, such as the release of dioxide carbon in the atmosphere, that an enormous number of people have contributed to occur, not only one country. To sum up, as I see it, several environmental problems have to be dealt with internationally because they have affected the whole planet. Governments have to maintain forces to fight for a life balance and to assist many species.

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issues
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 experts say these You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcomplicationdilemmaquestionobstacletroubledispute
problems
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. I strongly
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agree
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problem
 here could affect the whole world.

One major and crescent concern is related
 to deforestation, and we could take as an example Amazon Forest, which has been incredibly
 burnt since last year. The entire planet needs this forest in order to have oxygen to breathe. Consequently
, every country should be concerned
 about Amazon You use this word too often, consider replacing it withaffairpointquestionargumentcontroversytopic
issues
 and discuss how to combat the crimes that have occurred over there.

Another concern is about animals which are endangered
 and need assistance to survive. “When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
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has to
be dealt
 with internationally
. Moreover
, every single animal is essential for biodiversity and human being needs them to be alive.

Finally
, another You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcomplicationdilemmaquestionobstacletroubledispute
problem
 is the global warming that has been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :impacted
affected
 all of us. To illustrated, the ices that have been melted
 in the Antarctic have impacted the sea level worldwide. Moreover
, this is a consequence of several You use this word too often, consider replacing it withaffairpointquestionargumentcontroversytopic
issues
, such as the release of dioxide carbon in the atmosphere, that an enormous number of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 have contributed to occur, not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 one country.

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see
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problems
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have to
be dealt
 with internationally
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because
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affected
 the whole planet. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritiespublic authorities
Governments
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have to
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to fight
 for a life balance and to assist This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 species. 