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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening? What measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening? What measures can be taken to tackle this problem? PNnB
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IELTS essay Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening? What measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
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