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Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument

Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument 15EEM
Enacting the cow flu vaccine as a mandatory regular injection is facing issue in some areas. This issue comes from the argument between society who believed in the low rate of mortality of cow flu and the rest who choose to be safe—the idea to govern all people to get vaccine shots where the disease's epicenter is required. We need to consider peoples' safety who might be infected with the disease instead of listening to those who underestimate the spread of that flu itself. Although it would seem that the flu is not lethal and bring less severe effect, the flu that being disregarded proliferate everywhere can evolve and mutate in a worse way disease. A small and separated area can deteriorate into a more significant expanse or even change into a pandemic zone. It needs deeper comprehension of people's perspectives, especially those who refuse to get the shot, to be more open about the long-term effect. Some tragedies that happened in the history of several flu pandemics can be taken as examples. From pest, bird flu, swine flu, and other simple flu from animals were seen as simple matters at the first time. Making the vaccine obligatory is expected as a preventive method for the government and medics to handle and lower the probability of the flu being transformed or spread. Most people should start collecting the data about specific areas that get infected and list the people who live nearby or in that zone. It is always better to be safe than sorry when coping with the flu earlier once it gets way worse, more stressful and complicated situation. In conclusion, people's live rate shall be higher if the vaccine for cow flu is injected into all people in the infected areas, regardless of the low mortality of this flu or residents' opinions about this flu lethality.
Enacting the cow
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vaccine
as a mandatory regular injection is facing issue in
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some
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areas
. This issue
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comes
from the argument between society
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who
believed in the low rate of mortality of cow
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flu
and the rest
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who
choose to be safe—the
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idea
to govern all
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people
to
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get
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vaccine
shots where the disease's epicenter
is required
. We need to consider peoples' safety
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who
might
be infected
with the disease
instead
of listening to those
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who
underestimate the spread of that
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flu
itself.

Although it would seem that the
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flu
is not lethal and bring less severe effect, the
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flu
that
being disregarded
proliferate everywhere can evolve and mutate in a worse way disease. A
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small
and separated
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area
can deteriorate into a more significant expanse or even
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change
into a pandemic zone. It needs deeper comprehension of
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people
's perspectives,
especially
those
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who
refuse to
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get
the shot, to be more open about the long-term effect.
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Some
tragedies that happened in the history of several
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flu
pandemics can
be taken
as examples. From pest, bird
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flu
, swine
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flu
, and other simple
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flu
from animals were
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seen
as simple matters at the
first
time.

Making the
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vaccine
obligatory is
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expected
as a preventive method for the
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government
and medics to handle and lower the probability of the
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flu
being transformed
or spread. Most
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people
should
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start
collecting the data about specific
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areas
that
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get
infected and list the
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people
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who
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live
nearby or in that zone. It is always better to be safe than sorry when coping with the
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flu
earlier once it
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gets
way worse, more stressful and complicated situation.

In conclusion
,
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people
's
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live
rate shall be higher if the
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vaccine
for cow
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flu
is injected
into all
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people
in the infected
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areas
, regardless of the low mortality of this
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flu
or residents' opinions about this
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flu
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lethality
.
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IELTS essay Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument

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