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It is less important for families today to gather and eat. Do you agree or disagree?

It is less important for families today to gather and eat. 9LY3X
We had many costums which have been changed during the time and it is bacause of various reasons. Some of this traditional costums are constitsent since they are interesting for nowaday individuals. One of our traditional habits is the fact that families gather together and eat their meals and make a great warm circummestance and enjoy their foods. Some people hold an opinion that this manner has been removed from our families’ routine, however others believe that it is not eliminated and people still like to assemble together to eat their meals. Personally, I believe in first point of view. among nomerous reasons, which can vindicate my viewpoint, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following pragraphes. The first reason that juts out of my mind immediately pondering this issue is the fact that these days people are always in hurry and advent of technology makes individuales life more stressful, they have to work harder and more. For example, in the past folks have more time, they had weekends and vacation, nevertheless, nowadays people most of the time ought to work even at the weekends. These rush life prevent persons to join together like the past. It is not good at all because each of us needs to be in family’s cozy atmospher it will help us to improve our emotional feelings but unfortunately the situation makes us to be like this. There is an article which established in a science magazine that said according to a research on a milion employees, %50 of them eat their meals on a train, cummuting between their home and office. Is it really good to change those great meetings with family with eating our daily meals on a train alone? Secondly, these days we have great veriety in meals; While some elder persons like traditional food, younger individuales like fast foods, and it makes it hard for people to gather together to eat their meals. In the past there are few kind of foods I remember my father told me when he was kid, there were limited foods for their daily meals. For example he mentioned that they ate Abgoosht, which is a persian traditional food consist of meat, potato, onion, and some other ingrediants, every Friday and whole family even their uncles and aunts gathered together and served this delicious food together and he added that it was great atmosphere when you enjoy your food with whole family. But now, in my case, we can not get to the common point in our own family to eat what for lunch and dinner and most of the time we order food from resturan cause of different interests. It shows that at the present time it is hard to assemble whole family and even it is harder to cook a meal which is delicious for all. To make long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that these days families eat their meals seperately which is in the contrast to the past time, and it is because of some legical reasons but in my opinion we can manage our job and our time to spend more time with our family especialy in the meal time to gather and enjoy our food with our family it has great benefits for our soul and it will help us to be happier person.
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costums
which have been
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changed
during the
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bacause
of various
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.
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Some
of this
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traditional
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costums
are
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constitsent
since they are interesting for
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nowaday
individuals. One of our
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traditional
habits is the fact that
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families
gather together and
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eat
their
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meals
and
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make
a
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great
warm
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circummestance
and enjoy their
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foods
.
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Some
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people
hold an opinion that this manner has
been removed
from our
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families’
routine,
however
others believe that it is not eliminated and
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people
still
like to assemble together to
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eat
their
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meals
.
Personally
, I believe in
first
point of view.
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among
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nomerous
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reasons
, which can vindicate my viewpoint, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following
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pragraphes
.

The
first
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reason
that juts out of my mind immediately pondering this issue is the fact that these days
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people
are always in hurry and advent of technology
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makes
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individuales
life more stressful, they
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have to
work harder and more.
For example
, in the
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past
folks have more
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time
, they had weekends and vacation,
nevertheless
, nowadays
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people
most of the
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ought to work even at the weekends. These rush life
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prevent
persons to
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join
together like the
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. It is not
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good
at all
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because
each of us needs to be in
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family’s
cozy
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atmospher
it will
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help
us to
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improve
our emotional feelings
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but
unfortunately the situation
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makes
us to be like this. There is an article which established in a science magazine that said according to
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a research
on a
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milion
employees, %50 of them
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eat
their
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meals
on a train,
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cummuting
between their home and office. Is it
really
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good
to
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change
those
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great
meetings with
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family
with eating our daily
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meals
on a train alone?

Secondly
, these days we have
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great
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veriety
in
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meals
; While
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some
elder persons like
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traditional
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food
, younger
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individuales
like
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fast
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foods
, and it
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makes
it
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hard
for
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people
to gather together to
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eat
their
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meals
. In the
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past
there are
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few kind
of
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foods
I remember my father
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told
me when he was kid, there
were limited
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foods
for their daily
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meals
. For
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example he
mentioned that they ate
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Abgoosht
, which is a
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persian
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traditional
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food
consist of meat, potato, onion, and
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some
other
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ingrediants
, every Friday and whole
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family
even their uncles and aunts gathered together and served this delicious
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food
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together and
he
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added
that it was
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great
atmosphere when you enjoy your
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food
with whole
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family
.
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But
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now
, in my case, we can not
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get
to the common point in our
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own
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family
to
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eat
what for lunch and dinner and most of the
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time
we order
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food
from
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resturan
cause of
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different
interests. It
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shows
that at the present
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time
it is
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hard
to assemble whole
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family
and even it is harder to cook a
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meal
which is delicious for all.

To
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make
long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that these days
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families
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eat
their
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meals
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seperately
which is in the contrast to the
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, and it is
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of
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legical
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reasons
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but
in my opinion we can manage our job and our
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time
to spend more
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time
with our
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family
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especialy
in the
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meal
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time
to gather and enjoy our
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food
with our
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family
it has
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great
benefits for our soul and it will
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help
us to be happier person.
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IELTS essay It is less important for families today to gather and eat.

Essay
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