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It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. aOjV
It goes without saying that children are the future of the world. How they are taught to behave in childhood will define them as adults in society. The topic is certainly an agreeable one, thus kids with a variety of mental abilities and ones from different social backgrounds should get together at school. Therefore, in this essay, I will present two reasons why I strongly agree with this idea. On one hand, children with a comprehensive range of abilities should not be treated differently from kids with less abilities or those who come from different social backgrounds because it will be only negative. The ones with great range of abilities will believe that they are perfect, maybe reaching bullying to the ones who come from different social backgrounds, in the future. For example, I was in a special class, the one with kids which are good at mathematics. We had a colleague which had autism. As time passed by, we realised that despite his problem, he is an innocent kid, who doesn’t deserve to be ignored. So, handling children the same, will make them realise at a young age that no one is perfect and as long as they are on earth, they should be kind with each other. On the other hand, it is important to keep pupils from various social surroundings together because it can help to a different point of view. It is scientifically proven that kids who come from lower social class are not as open minded as the ones who come from the upper one. By staying together, it can change the perspective to the children who come from lower class. Social class is a sensitive issue to society, therefore the ones who come from upper social class will learn to respect everyone, no matter which social class he belongs. What is more, keeping them together, will be a solution to racism and discrimination, which is a huge problem nowadays. To conclude, following the above, it is important to assure that children with a great range of abilities and the ones who come from a various social term, mix with each other at school, thus kids develop and learn new things together which will be useful for a long time, not only in society but in their personal life.
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children
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are taught
to behave in childhood will define them as adults in society. The topic is
certainly
an agreeable one,
thus
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kids
with a variety of mental
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abilities
and
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ones
from
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different
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social
backgrounds should
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get
together at school.
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strongly
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agree
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On one hand,
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children
with a comprehensive range of
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abilities
should not
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differently
from
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kids
with
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less
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abilities
or those
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negative
. The
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ones
with great range of
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abilities
will believe that they are perfect, maybe reaching bullying to the
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ones
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who
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come
from
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different
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backgrounds, in the future.
For example
, I was in a special
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class
, the one with
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kids
which are
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good
at mathematics. We had a colleague which had autism. As time passed by, we
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realised
that despite his problem, he is an innocent
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kid
,
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who
doesn’t deserve to be
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ignored
.
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So
, handling
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children
the same, will
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make
them
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realise
at a young age that no one is perfect and as long as they are on earth, they should be kind with each other.

On the other hand
, it is
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important
to
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pupils from various
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surroundings together
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scientifically
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kids
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from lower
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social
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are not as
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open minded
as the
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from the upper one. By staying together, it can
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change
the perspective to the
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children
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come
from lower
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class
.
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is a sensitive issue to society,
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from upper
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will learn to respect everyone, no matter which
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he belongs.
What is more
, keeping them together, will be a solution to racism and discrimination, which is a huge problem nowadays.

To conclude
, following the above, it is
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important
to assure that
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children
with a great range of
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abilities
and the
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ones
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who
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come
from a various
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social
term, mix with each other at school,
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kids
develop and learn new things together which will be useful for a long time, not
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only
in society
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in their personal life.
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IELTS essay It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
384 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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