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In the past several years a number of technological advances have made laser eye surgery more widely available The procedure uses tiny lasers to alter the surface of the eyeball significantly improving a patient s vision In spite of its growing popularity

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Both the reading and the lecture are talking about the laser eye surgery and cons and pons of that. The article proposes that this costly procedure has several post operation drawbacks. It is not cost-risk beneficial for people. Conversely, the lecturer challenges the book’s information and asserts that those ideas are not accurate. Then he gives us more information to solve the misunderstandings. First, the reading states that the cost of eye surgery is the first burden for people. It mentions that one to two thousands dollars out of the packet is not affordable for many of the people. On the other hand, the professor avers that there is some good news about the advanced new technologies which provide us cheaper technological instruments and eye surgery. In addition, the number of eye surgeons increased recently. This lead to more competition between them to attract patients. As a result, the more competition cause decrease in cost of laser eye surgery. He claims that nowadays the cost of surgery has decreased by 30 percent. Second, the article points out that laser eye surgery has some post-operation adverse effects such as cornea detachment, which makes this procedure unfavorable. Controversially, the speaker rebuts this idea by mentioning that the laser eye surgery has not those kinds of adverse effects. He posits that just one case of cornea detachment has reported which it was related to high pressure of eye liquid, not the laser surgery. He explains that the average healing time for laser eye surgery is similar to other surgeries, something around a couple of days. Third, the article mentions that another problem of eye surgery is the undefined lasting time of eyesight correction. However, the professor asserts that it is uncommon that a patient needs surgery again after months or years. He asserts that many cases have had a very good eyesight even after twenty years. He repudiates all the book’s information about the eye surgery problems and mentions that the cost is decreasing and post operation side effect is like other surgeries, also the duration of eye correction is very long.
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are not accurate. Then he gives us more information to solve the misunderstandings.

First
, the reading states that the
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cost
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eye
surgery is the
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people
. It mentions that one to two thousands dollars out of the packet is not affordable for
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good
news about the advanced new technologies which provide us cheaper technological instruments and
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eye
surgery.
In addition
, the number of
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eye
surgeons increased recently. This lead to more competition between them to attract patients.
As a result
, the more competition cause decrease in
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cost
of
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laser
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surgery. He claims that nowadays the
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cost
of surgery has decreased by 30 percent.

Second, the article points out that
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surgery has
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post-operation adverse effects such as cornea detachment, which
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, the speaker rebuts this
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by mentioning that the
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surgery has not those kinds of adverse effects. He posits that
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one case of cornea detachment has reported which it
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liquid, not the
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surgery. He
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explains
that the average healing time for
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laser
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surgery is similar to other surgeries, something around a couple of days.

Third, the article mentions that another problem of
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surgery is the undefined lasting time of eyesight correction.
However
, the professor asserts that it is uncommon that a patient needs surgery again after months or years. He asserts that
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cases have had a
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eyesight even after twenty years. He repudiates all the book’s information about the
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eye
surgery problems and mentions that the
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cost
is decreasing and post operation side effect is like other surgeries,
also
the duration of
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correction is
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IELTS essay In the past several years a number of technological advances have made laser eye surgery more widely available The procedure uses tiny lasers to alter the surface of the eyeball significantly improving a patient s vision In spite of its growing popularity

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4 paragraphs
349 words
6.0
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