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In many workplaces, online communication is getting more common than meeting face to face. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

The interaction between workmates through online is more common these days compared to personal meetings. The innovation of technology made communication a lot more accessible and easier but personal meetings should be done to create a harmonious and dynamic workplace. Humans are social beings and we have created countless of inventions to bypass the difficulties in communication around the world. Inventions such as computers, smartphones, and social medias platforms united the world in exchanging news and whereabouts of the society. In the same manner, offices and corporations sometimes opt to interact through online to get instant feedbacks and ideas between peers, without the need to meet at certain locations. For instance, subordinates often communicate with their supervisors online to report incidents at a faster pace. This creates a much smoother flow in the exchange of ideas and a faster way as well. On the other hand, personal meetings creates a more genuine interaction between peers. This also improves social skills and teamwork in a workplace. Furthermore, the absence of personal meetings could jeopardize the relationship between workmates caused by the lack of human touch and presence. Social interactions between workmates creates a personal relationship beyond work which could probably improve their performance. After all, a good ambience between workmates yield higher performing employees. In conclusion, although online communication is a good way to send feedbacks and ideas instantly in a workplace, meeting face to face is more advantageous in creating a healthier social relationship at work which boosts confidence and improvement in work ethics.
The interaction between
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is more common these days compared to
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personal
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meetings
. The innovation of technology made communication a lot more accessible and
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easier
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personal
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meetings
should
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create
a harmonious and dynamic workplace.

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social
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beings and
we have created
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countless of inventions
to bypass the difficulties in communication around the world. Inventions such as computers, smartphones, and
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social
medias platforms united the world in exchanging news and whereabouts of the society. In the same manner, offices and corporations
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opt to interact through
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online
to
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get
instant feedbacks and
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ideas
between peers, without the need to
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meet
at certain locations.
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, subordinates
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often
communicate with their supervisors
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online
to report incidents at a faster pace. This
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creates
a much smoother flow in the exchange of
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ideas
and a faster way
as well
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personal
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creates
a more genuine interaction between peers. This
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social
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skills
and teamwork in a workplace.
Furthermore
, the absence of
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personal
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could jeopardize the relationship between
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workmates
caused by the lack of human touch and presence.
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interactions between
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workmates
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creates
a
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personal
relationship beyond work which could
probably
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improve
their performance.
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, a
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ambience between
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workmates
yield higher performing employees.

In conclusion
, although
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communication is a
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way to
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feedbacks and
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ideas
instantly
in a workplace,
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meeting
face to face is more advantageous in creating a healthier
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social
relationship at work which boosts confidence and improvement in work ethics.
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IELTS essay In many workplaces, online communication is getting more common than meeting face to face. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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254 words
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