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in many countries, number of older people are increase. some people says that this will cause more problems to that countries. others say that older people can play a role in society. discuss both views and give your opinion.

in many countries, number of older people are increase. some people says that this will cause more problems to that countries. others say that older people can play a role in society. VByEw
IT IS OFTEN BELIEVE THAT IN MANY NATIONS, LIFE EXPETANCY HAS BEEB INCREASING DUE TO ADVANCEMENT THE TECHNOLOGY. FEW FOLKS FEELS THAT IT WILL CREAT A PROBLEMS FOR THEM. WHILE OTHER SAYS THAT THEY CAN CONTRIBUTE IN THE COMMINITY DEVELOPMENT. FROM MY OPINION, AGINING POPULATION DO FORM PROBLEM FOR THEM LIKE HEALTH PROBLEM AND SO ON. BUT IT IS ALSO TRUE THAT THIS PEOPLE CAN BE A ROLE MODEL IN SIGNIFICANT COMMI ITY DEVELOPMENT. TO START WITH, FIRSTLY, MORE SENIOR PEOPLE, THERE WILL BE MORE HELATH PROBLEMS. WHEN MORE HEALTH PROBLEMS OCCOURED, THEY TAKE MORE INSUARANCE. THUS WHEN THEY GET ILL THEY USE THEIR INSUARANCE AND EMPLOYER HAS TO PAY MORE FOR THAT. EVENTHOUGH THEY ARE NOT WORKING ENOUGH FOR IT. TO ELABORATE. AS PER THE THE STUDY CONDUCATED IN INDIA, SO THUS GOVERNMENT IS INCREASING MORE TAX. SO THIS HAPPENS, THERE WILL MORE BURDEN ON THE TODAY'S YOUTH. FOR AN EXAMPLE, HOSPITAL STUDY CONDUCTED IN INDIA SHOWS THAT THERE ARE MORE AGED PEOPLE ADMITTED IJ THE HOSPITAL DUE TO VARIOUS HEALTH PROBLEMS LIKE A HEART ATTACK, DIABILITY, PNUMONIA ETC. THIS HAS FORMED MORE INSURANCE CLAIM FORM THE WORKER. WHEN THEY DO THIS AUTHORITY INCREASED TAX FRO EVERY THINKGS. SO BY THIS THERE ARE MORE PRESSURE ON THE YOUNGSTERS TO PRODUCE MORE MONEY. ON THE OTHER HAND, ADGED PEOPLE CAN CONTRIBUTE IN SOCIETY ENHANCEMENT BY SHARING THEIR EXPERIENCES WITH THE TODAY'S GENERATION, TEACHING THEM HOW TO BE A GOOD MEMBER OF THE SOCIETY FINALLY BY TEACHEING THEM MORAL VALUES AND CUSTOM OF THAT COUNTRY. TO ILLUSTRATE, BY HAVING THIS INFORMATION AND KNOWLEDGE FROM SENIORS, YOUNGSTERS CAN BE GOOD INDIVIDUALS OF THE SOCIETY. FOR AN INSTANCE, I HAD A GRANDFATHER WHO TAUGHT ME THAT WHATEVER HAPPENS DO NOT LOSE YOUR CHARACTER. DEAL WITH IT AND HELP EVERYONE WHO ARE IN NEED. HOWEVER, THERE ARE DECREASE IN NUMBER OF NEW GENERATION IN COMPARE TO OLDER ONE. IN MY OPINION
IT IS
OFTEN
BELIEVE THAT IN
MANY
NATIONS, LIFE
EXPETANCY
HAS
BEEB
INCREASING DUE TO ADVANCEMENT THE TECHNOLOGY. FEW FOLKS FEELS THAT IT WILL
CREAT
A
PROBLEMS
FOR THEM. WHILE OTHER SAYS THAT THEY CAN CONTRIBUTE IN THE
COMMINITY
DEVELOPMENT. FROM MY OPINION,
AGINING
POPULATION DO FORM
PROBLEM
FOR THEM LIKE HEALTH
PROBLEM
AND
SO
ON.
BUT
IT IS
ALSO
TRUE THAT THIS
PEOPLE
CAN BE A ROLE MODEL IN SIGNIFICANT
COMMI
ITY
DEVELOPMENT.

TO
START
WITH,
FIRSTLY
, MORE SENIOR
PEOPLE
, THERE WILL BE MORE
HELATH
PROBLEMS
. WHEN MORE HEALTH
PROBLEMS
OCCOURED
, THEY TAKE MORE
INSUARANCE
.
THUS
WHEN THEY
GET
ILL THEY
USE
THEIR
INSUARANCE
AND EMPLOYER
HAS TO
PAY MORE FOR THAT.
EVENTHOUGH
THEY ARE NOT WORKING
ENOUGH
FOR IT. TO ELABORATE. AS PER
THE THE
STUDY
CONDUCATED
IN INDIA,
SO
THUS
GOVERNMENT
IS INCREASING MORE TAX.
SO
THIS HAPPENS, THERE WILL MORE BURDEN ON THE
TODAY
'S YOUTH. FOR AN EXAMPLE, HOSPITAL STUDY CONDUCTED IN INDIA
SHOWS
THAT THERE ARE MORE AGED
PEOPLE
ADMITTED IJ THE HOSPITAL DUE TO VARIOUS HEALTH
PROBLEMS
LIKE A HEART ATTACK,
DIABILITY
,
PNUMONIA
ETC. THIS HAS FORMED MORE INSURANCE CLAIM
FORM
THE WORKER. WHEN THEY DO THIS AUTHORITY INCREASED TAX
FRO
EVERY
THINKGS
.
SO
BY THIS THERE ARE MORE PRESSURE ON THE YOUNGSTERS TO PRODUCE MORE MONEY.

ON THE OTHER HAND
,
ADGED
PEOPLE
CAN CONTRIBUTE IN SOCIETY ENHANCEMENT BY SHARING THEIR EXPERIENCES WITH THE
TODAY
'S GENERATION, TEACHING THEM HOW TO BE A
GOOD
MEMBER OF THE SOCIETY
FINALLY
BY
TEACHEING
THEM MORAL VALUES AND CUSTOM OF THAT COUNTRY. TO ILLUSTRATE, BY HAVING THIS INFORMATION AND KNOWLEDGE FROM SENIORS, YOUNGSTERS CAN BE
GOOD
INDIVIDUALS OF THE SOCIETY. FOR AN INSTANCE, I HAD A GRANDFATHER WHO TAUGHT ME THAT WHATEVER HAPPENS DO NOT LOSE YOUR CHARACTER. DEAL WITH IT AND
HELP
EVERYONE WHO ARE IN NEED.
HOWEVER
, THERE ARE DECREASE IN NUMBER OF NEW GENERATION IN COMPARE TO OLDER ONE.

IN MY OPINION
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IELTS essay in many countries, number of older people are increase. some people says that this will cause more problems to that countries. others say that older people can play a role in society.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
7
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