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Health care should not be provided for free regardless of a person’s income. The health of a person is in their own hands and they should, therefore, be held accountable for that. Do you agree with this statement?

Health care should not be provided for free regardless of a person’s income. The health of a person is in their own hands and they should, therefore, be held accountable for that. 2JEk
Expenses incurred by healthcare play a decisive factor in a country’s economy. Owing to the fact, a country like India, the population is growing exponentially and may lead the government to bear a massive amount of hospital expenses incurred by the citizens; consequently, the country’s cashflow gets affected badly. Therefore, I totally agree that government should not provide subsidies to any kind of expenses related to healthcare. Two arguments in the favour of agreement are explained below. To begin with, countries' development is dependent on several economic-related factors and healthcare takes most of it. In every year's financial budgets, countries are reserving more than 50% of the budget in healthcare. Due to, the other sectors must suffer from lack of financial resources. For instance, instead of spending huge money in the health care sector, the government can make use of it in sports. As a result, the country can host numerous international sports activities, which attracts audiences from all over the world. On the other hand, it’s our own responsibility to take care of our health. In the present era, people are taken their health for granted and which results in them having several health-related issues. The reason being is, health care schemes can bear all their medical bills. In most cases, people with stable financial support are also availing the healthcare schemes. For instance, one of my friends, who has sufficient funds in his account, got his cardia surgery absolutely free of cost by availing of the healthcare scheme. In the conclusion, the government should only allocate a decent amount of money to the health care systems with the bare minimum schemes. At the same time, it is our topmost responsibility to keep our health in good shape.
Expenses incurred by healthcare play a decisive factor in a
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country’s
economy. Owing to the fact, a
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country
like India, the population is growing
exponentially
and may lead the
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government
to bear a massive amount of hospital expenses incurred by the citizens;
consequently
, the
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country’s
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cashflow
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gets
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affected
badly
.
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, I
totally
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agree
that
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government
should not provide subsidies to any kind of expenses related to healthcare. Two arguments in the
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favour
of agreement are
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explained
below.

To
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begin
with, countries' development is dependent on several economic-related factors and healthcare takes most of it. In every year's financial budgets,
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countries
are reserving more than 50% of the budget in healthcare. Due to, the other sectors
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must
suffer from lack of financial resources.
For instance
,
instead
of spending huge money in the
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health
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care
sector, the
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government
can
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make
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use
of it in sports.
As a result
, the
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country
can host numerous international sports activities, which attracts audiences from all over the world.

On the other hand
, it’s our
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own
responsibility to take
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care
of our
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health
. In the present era,
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people
are taken
their
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health
for granted and which results in them having several health-related issues. The reason being is,
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health
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care
schemes can bear all their medical bills.
In most cases
,
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people
with stable financial support are
also
availing the healthcare schemes.
For instance
, one of my friends, who has sufficient funds in his account,
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got
his
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cardia
surgery
absolutely
free of cost by availing of the healthcare scheme.

In the conclusion, the
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government
should
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only
allocate a decent amount of money to the
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health
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care
systems with the bare minimum schemes. At the same time, it is our topmost responsibility to
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keep
our
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health
in
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good
shape.
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IELTS essay Health care should not be provided for free regardless of a person’s income. The health of a person is in their own hands and they should, therefore, be held accountable for that.

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