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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments and private companies should share their scientific discoveries with the rest of the world

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Without a shadow of a doubt, the scientific discoveries undeniably play an important role in human life as they are being used for the society and the country where the research take place. A controversial argument that often raised regarding this topic is whether the discoveries of the private companies and government should be exclusive or not. If I were obliged to opt, I would think that all the breakthroughs and new information should be shared with the rest of the world for several reasons, on a few of which I will elaborate consequently. The first imperative reason is that countries are trying hard to widespread democracy and show that regardless of the human skin color and genetic, they are all equal. Never can humans reach to have a democratic world to live in, unless they get rid of the secrets and the monopoly advantageous technology. A compelling example to clarify this issue is to imagine that one country achieved an approach to overcome the lack of sufficient food by manipulating the plants' genes. Also one can argue that the country can sell the food or export the product, but in that case, the pauper countries which are not able to pay have to suffer from hunger and become extinct. Hence, this is exactly the opposite of the aim of equality to let others face famine. The second reason corroborating my view is that sharing information with other countries helps them to improve. To explain more, there are severe obstacles that all the world struggle with like the disease, environmental issues, economic problems, and so forth. In some laboratories, the solution to many of the difficulties is found, however, the policy of that company or the selfish rule of that country prohibits the information to leak out. My own experience can shed light on this issue. I am a chemist and work in a company to refine the water of the oceans to drinkable water that is necessary for all living creatures. The farming industries in many places vanished as a result of inappropriate water they use for the products farmers plant. It is conspicuous that some countries are going to broke down since their first industry was cultivation. Had my company let this information release, that aforementioned country could get scape from further damage. To sum it up, I strongly believe that all the scientific discoveries should be free to use by other governments and companies. This is because not only will it demonstrates all humans are the same, but it also helps the countries in trouble to defeat their problems.
Without a shadow of a doubt, the scientific discoveries
undeniably
play an
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important
role in
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human
life as they are being
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used
for the society and the
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country
where the research take place. A controversial argument that
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often
raised regarding this topic is whether the discoveries of the private
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companies
and
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government
should be exclusive or not. If I
were obliged
to opt, I would
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think
that all the breakthroughs and new
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information
should
be shared
with the rest of the world for several reasons, on a few of which I will elaborate
consequently
.

The
first
imperative reason is that
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countries
are trying
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hard
to widespread democracy and
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show
that regardless of the
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human
skin color and genetic, they are all equal. Never can
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humans
reach to have a democratic world to
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live
in, unless they
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get
rid of the secrets and the monopoly advantageous technology. A compelling example to clarify this issue is to imagine that one
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country
achieved an approach to overcome the lack of sufficient food by manipulating the plants' genes.
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Also
one can argue that the
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country
can sell the food or export the product,
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but
in that case
, the pauper
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countries
which are not able to pay
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have to
suffer from hunger and become extinct.
Hence
, this is exactly the opposite of the aim of equality to
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let
others face famine.

The second reason corroborating my view is that sharing
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information
with other
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countries
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helps
them to
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improve
. To
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explain
more, there are severe obstacles that all the world struggle with like the disease, environmental issues, economic problems, and
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so
forth. In
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some
laboratories, the solution to
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many
of the difficulties
is found
,
however
, the policy of that
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company
or the selfish
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rule
of that
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country
prohibits the
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information
to leak out. My
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own
experience can shed light on this issue. I am a chemist and work in a
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company
to refine the water of the oceans to drinkable water
that is
necessary for all living creatures. The farming industries in
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many
places vanished
as a result
of inappropriate water they
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use
for the products farmers plant. It is conspicuous that
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some
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countries
are going to
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broke
down since their
first
industry was cultivation. Had my
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company
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let
this
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information
release, that aforementioned
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country
could
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get scape
from
further
damage.

To sum it up, I
strongly
believe that all the scientific discoveries should be free to
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use
by other
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governments
and
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companies
. This is
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because
not
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only
will it demonstrates all
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humans
are the same,
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but
it
also
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helps
the
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countries
in trouble to defeat their problems.
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IELTS essay Governments and private companies should share their scientific discoveries with the rest of the world

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