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Nowadays, many people start to pay more attention to our food. Undisputedly, consuming healthy and nutritious food is vital for each person. Thus, the government is supposed to take the responsibility to supply high-quality food in order to make its citizens fit and happy. From my point of view, the government in my country has done a good job in this aspect. I am going to elaborate my point in the following paragraphs. First, in the past few years, our healthy department has actually released various kinds of policies to detect nourishing supplements. In this way, a large number of citizens definitely consider the government is protecting them from any bad-quality(inferior) food that may damage their health. Prior to these regulations, my father was a crazy fan of a type of fake product because he was cheated by its large-scale advertising campaign. However, thanks to relative departments, he now is able to discern between real and false nutritious food. Consequently, there is no doubt the government is putting efforts to convey correct knowledge to his people. Furthermore, regulators in our state enhance the punishment of generating unhealthy food. At the same time, fake ads on food are banned in public. Also, food factories dare not to produce false food in case of heavy penalties. For instance, a market has been suspended for two months by a local government since the vegetables they sold was not fresh. Therefore, in a sense, states are taking actions to guarantee its people a better diet style. Nevertheless, the publicity sometimes cannot(fail to) stretch to everywhere so a small section of citizens has no idea about these reforms. As far as I concerned, it is inevitable since our country land is so large. In practice, officers in healthy departments are doing the deed. In conclusion, incredible movements done by the government in my state is based on several concrete benefits for us in terms of the present and future. By eating a wide variety of(all sorts of) healthy products, we can work more efficient and live a better life.
Nowadays,
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many
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people
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start
to pay more attention to our
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food
.
Undisputedly
, consuming
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healthy
and nutritious
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food
is vital for each person.
Thus
, the
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government
is supposed
to take the responsibility to supply high-quality
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food
in order to
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make
its citizens fit and happy. From my point of view, the
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government
in my country has done a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
job in this aspect. I am going to elaborate my point in the following paragraphs.

First
, in the past few years, our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
department has actually released various kinds of policies to detect nourishing supplements. In this way,
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a large number of
citizens definitely consider the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is protecting them from any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
-quality(inferior)
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food
that may damage their health. Prior to these regulations, my father was a crazy fan of a type of fake product
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because
he
was cheated
by its large-scale advertising campaign.
However
, thanks to relative departments, he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
is able to discern between real and false nutritious
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
.
Consequently
, there is no doubt the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is putting efforts to convey correct knowledge to his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

Furthermore
, regulators in our state enhance the punishment of generating unhealthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
. At the same time, fake ads on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
are banned
in public.
Also
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
factories dare not to produce false
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
in case of heavy penalties.
For instance
, a market has
been suspended
for two months by a local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
since the vegetables they sold was not fresh.
Therefore
, in a sense, states are taking actions to guarantee its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
a better diet style.

Nevertheless
, the publicity
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
cannot(fail to) stretch to everywhere
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so
a
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small
section of citizens has no
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idea
about these reforms. As far as I concerned, it is inevitable since our country land is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
large. In practice, officers in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
departments are doing the deed.

In conclusion
, incredible movements done by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
in my state
is based
on several concrete benefits for us in terms of the present and future. By eating a wide variety of(all sorts of)
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
products, we can work more efficient and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
a better life.

IELTS essay Government

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
344 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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