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Do you think that technological advancement has brought more harm than good ? Reasons and support your answer .

Do you think that technological advancement has brought more harm than good? Reasons and support your answer. e5bPA
Nowadays, technology more popular in all over the globe. Whilst, a number of folks vocalize that telecommunication has further harm. I believe that its advantages outweigh disadvantages. To begin with, technology has abundant of benefits such as easily communicate and high tech in medical. To elaborate it, in 20th century a lot of diseases pounce on everyone like heart attack, cancer etcetra, cosequently with advancement in medical science doctors do all kinds of treatments as compared with ancient time. To examplify, the department of dovtors in London's city hospital. When doctors study about new treatments then not many will be die on account of several injuries. As a result, individual enjoy their life without having pain. However, a gigantic drawbacks of technology is lethargic lifestyle as well as weak eyesight. In this modern era, from kids to grey haired masses love to use mobile phones which directly affect on individual's eyes. In Canada, a scrutiny report layouts by British Broadcasting Coorporation (BBC) news channel a colossal of civilians have spectals on their eyes. Thus, they can not see properly and may be coming generation also face it. To sum up, although technology assistance to meet up with kith and kin comfortably, whereas it also affect everyone's eyesight.
Nowadays,
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technology
more popular in all over the globe. Whilst, a number of folks vocalize that telecommunication has
further
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harm
. I believe that its advantages outweigh disadvantages. To
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begin
with,
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technology
has abundant of benefits such as
easily
communicate and high tech in medical. To elaborate it, in 20th century
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a lot of
diseases pounce on everyone like heart attack, cancer
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etcetra
,
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cosequently
with advancement in medical science doctors do all kinds of treatments as compared with ancient time.
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To
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examplify
, the department of
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dovtors
in London's city hospital.
“When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
doctors study about new treatments then not
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many
will be
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die
on account of several injuries.
As a result
, individual enjoy their life without having pain.
However
, a gigantic
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drawbacks
of
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technology
is lethargic lifestyle
as well
as weak eyesight. In this modern era, from kids to
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grey
haired masses
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love
to
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use
mobile phones which
directly
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affect
on individual's eyes. In Canada, a scrutiny report layouts by British Broadcasting
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Coorporation
(BBC) news channel
The phrase 'a colossal of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'a' and 'of'.
a colossal of
civilians have
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spectals
on their eyes.
Thus
, they can not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
properly
and may be coming generation
also
face it. To sum up, although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
assistance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
up with kith and kin
comfortably
, whereas it
also
Did you mean "affects"?
affect
everyone's eyesight.
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IELTS essay Do you think that technological advancement has brought more harm than good? Reasons and support your answer.

Essay
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