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Directors of large organization earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do some people think it is necessary but others hold that it is unfair.discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Directors of large organization earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do some people think it is necessary but others hold that it is unfair. M0q9
Earning money for survive a life is mandatory. In our culture it is fact that directors of huge organizations earning more than ordinary employees but one school of thought asserts that it is unfair, while some people believe that it is necessary. Both the views are discussed in trail paragraphs, keeping wages of directors and employees as focal point, before reaching the logical conclusion. First and foremost reason for providing more salaries to directors of big organization is that they have less work but more responsibility compare to employees and authority gives more risk of loosing job because if employees do something wrong but directors do not check it properly then it is loss of directors not others. Also, directors are more experienced couple with the higher source knowledge and education so they deserve more salaries for these qualities. Moreover, directors are boss when owner is not present so their position is also high. Due to all these reasons directors deserve more compensation for their duty and work. In sharp contrast, ordinary employees have more work, they are working from dawn to dusk for that company or organization and some are there who dedicate their whole life solely to the one corporation but they do not earn more than directors. In terms of their hard work and dedication is biasness to give less salaries to them compare to directors because directors because directors are there because of employees so employees are base of that organization, however, they have only knowledge of the area in which they are working not the other fields of company and to become director of organization they must have wide range of knowledge and ideas to bring the corporation at top level. Weighing both the views, it can be concluded that it is not unfair or partiality between directors and employees because knowledge, productivity, responsibility, and experience are more essential than work for organization. Hence, directors deserves high wages.
Earning money for survive a life is mandatory. In our culture it is fact that
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of huge
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earning more than ordinary
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employees
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but
one school of
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thought
asserts that it is unfair, while
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some
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people
believe that it is necessary. Both the views
are discussed
in trail paragraphs, keeping wages of
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directors
and
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employees
as focal point,
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before
reaching the logical conclusion.

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and foremost reason for providing more salaries to
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directors
of
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big
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organization
is that they have less
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work
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but
more responsibility compare to
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employees
and authority gives more
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risk
of loosing job
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because
if
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employees
do something
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wrong
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but
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directors
do not
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check
it
properly
then it is loss of
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not others.
Also
,
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directors
are more experienced couple with the higher source
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knowledge
and education
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so
they deserve more salaries for these qualities.
Moreover
,
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directors
are boss when owner is not present
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so
their position is
also
high. Due to all these reasons
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directors
deserve more compensation for their duty and work.

In sharp contrast, ordinary
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employees
have more
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work
, they are working from dawn to dusk for that
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company
or
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organization
and
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some
are there who dedicate their whole life
solely
to the one corporation
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but
they do not earn more than
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directors
. In terms of their
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hard
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work
and dedication is
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biasness
to give
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less
salaries to them compare to
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directors
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because
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directors
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because
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directors
are there
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of
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employees
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so
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are base of that
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organization
,
however
, they have
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only
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knowledge
of the area in which they are working not the other fields of
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company
and to become
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director
of
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organization
they
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must
have wide range of
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knowledge
and
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ideas
to bring the corporation at
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top level
.

Weighing both the views, it can
be concluded
that it is not unfair or partiality between
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directors
and
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employees
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because
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knowledge
, productivity, responsibility, and experience are more essential than
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work
for
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organization
.
Hence
,
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directors
deserves high wages.
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IELTS essay Directors of large organization earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do some people think it is necessary but others hold that it is unfair.

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4 paragraphs
323 words
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