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Commuter use of the new subway train is exceeding the transit company s projections However commuter use of the shuttle buses that transport people to the subway stations is below the projected volume If the transit company expects commuters to ride the s

Commuter use of the new subway train is exceeding the transit company s projections However commuter use of the shuttle buses that transport people to the subway stations is below the projected volume If the transit company expects commuters to ride the s n6DLP
The arguments claims that if a transit company expects commuters to ride the shuttle buses to reach subway stations rather than drive there, it will either reduce of buses fare or increase the price of parking at subway stations. To support the argument, author says that new subway train uses is increasing and commuter use of shuttle buses to station is below projected volume. Stated in this way, the argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. Hence, the conclusion of argument relies on several assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. The argument is weak, unconvincing and has several flaws. The arguments readily assumes that train commuters are only customers of shuttles buses. If commuters rides the shuttle bus then fares will reduce. This statement is a stretch and not substantiated in any way. For example, it could be possible that buses are already operating at full capacity. If it were the case, then the fares would not be reduced as there is no places for any commuter in the bus. The argument could have been much clearer if the arguments provide evidences of current capacity of buses. The argument claims that when people drive to subway stations, it will increase the price of parking there. There is no evidence provided by the argument to support this statement. Price of parking at a place depends on several factors such location, traffic of customer, and management of parking. No details was given about any such factors. Thirdly, the arguments is providing correlation and causal relationship. If any event happens before another events, it does not mean the former is the cause of latter. Evidence and supporting statements are required to established such relationship. Without any data about location of parking, how use of shuttle buses reduce of the fares of shuttle buses, how commuters ride to shuttle buses would increase the price of parking at the subway stations, argument would remain be flawed. In order to assess the merits of a certain situation / decision, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors. In this particular case we requirs locations, proper reasoning, etc. Without these informations, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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claims
that if a transit
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company
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expects
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commuters
to ride the
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shuttle
buses to reach
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subway
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stations
rather
than drive there, it will either
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reduce
of buses
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fare
or increase the
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price
of
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parking
at
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subway
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stations
. To support the
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argument
, author says that new
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subway
train
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uses
is increasing and
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commuter
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use
of
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shuttle
buses to
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station
is below projected volume. Stated in this way, the
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argument
fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could
be evaluated
.
Hence
, the conclusion of
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argument
relies on several assumptions for which there is no
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clear
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evidence
. The
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argument
is weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.

The
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readily
assumes that train
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commuters
are
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only
customers of
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shuttles
buses. If
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commuters
rides the
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shuttle
bus then
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fares
will
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reduce
. This statement is a stretch and not substantiated in any way.
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, it could be possible that buses are already operating at full capacity. If it were the case, then the
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fares
would not be
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reduced
as there is no places for any
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commuter
in the bus. The
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argument
could have been much clearer if the
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provide
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evidences
of
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current
capacity of buses.

The
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claims that when
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people
drive to
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subway
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stations
, it will increase the
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price
of
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parking
there. There is no
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evidence
provided by the
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argument
to support this statement.
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Price
of
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parking
at a place depends on several factors such location, traffic of customer, and management of
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parking
. No
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details
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was
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about any such factors.

Thirdly
, the
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is providing correlation and causal relationship. If any
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happens
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before
another
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, it does not mean the former is the cause of latter.
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and supporting statements
are required
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to established
such relationship.

Without any data about location of
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buses, how
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commuters
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shuttle
buses would increase the
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price
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stations
,
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would remain
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.

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locations, proper reasoning, etc. Without these
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informations
, the
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remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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IELTS essay Commuter use of the new subway train is exceeding the transit company s projections However commuter use of the shuttle buses that transport people to the subway stations is below the projected volume If the transit company expects commuters to ride the s

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
376 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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