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children should always listen to parents' advice. to what extend do you agree?

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It is believed that children should always adhere strictly to advice given by their parents. Personally, I partially agree with this view, and will give my reasons below. On the one hand, some parental advice would help develop children’s positive character traits, allowing them to grow up as good members of society. For example, most children are often taught during childhood to share their favourite toys with their friends, to always tell the truth, to treat others with respect, to help those who are less advantaged or needy people, and so on. This in turn may shape caring, thoughtful, responsible and well-mannered human beings when they reach adulthood. In this way, children could benefit greatly from listening to their parents. Nevertheless, I believe that children should not ask for consultation with parents before they make any crucial decision. To illustrate, when it comes to educational or career choices, it may be children who have the potential to make better decisions than anyone else. This is because many parents often wish their sons and daughters to follow in their footsteps. Therefore, they tend to suggest that their children choose a career path about which they may be not really passionate. In my view, children should follow their heart when making important choices in order to gain the greatest amount of satisfaction and fulfilment. In conclusion, while heeding to advice provided by parents can be seen as beneficial to children’s personality development, I am convinced that for their own sake, children should make their own decisions by themselves.
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develop
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character traits, allowing them to grow up as
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good
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are
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taught during childhood to share their
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toys with their friends, to always
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tell
the truth, to treat others with respect, to
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those who are less advantaged or needy
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on. This in turn may shape caring, thoughtful, responsible and well-mannered human beings when they reach adulthood. In this way,
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children
could benefit
greatly
from listening to their parents.

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children
should not
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before
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make
any crucial decision. To illustrate, when it
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children
who have the potential to
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make
better decisions than anyone else. This is
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parents
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wish their sons and daughters to follow in their footsteps.
Therefore
, they tend to suggest that their
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children
choose a career path about which they may be not
really
passionate. In my view,
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children
should follow their heart when making
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important
choices in order to gain the greatest amount of satisfaction and
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fulfilment
.

In conclusion
, while heeding to advice provided by
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parents
can be
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as beneficial to
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children’s
personality development, I
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own
sake,
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their
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own
decisions by themselves.
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IELTS essay children should always listen to parents' advice.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
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