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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? R7YW
Buying things on the internet e. g, books, air tickets and groceries are catching popularity in the new modern era of technology with the increasing number of online services and startups catering to these services. According to my opinion the advantages for the premise outweigh the disadvantages by far, this is happening due to the increased comfort and more available options a consumer can get while shopping online wether it is for groceries, air tickets or books. A consumer can get all the available options for a product and compare for the best price online in the instant of a mouse click but that won't be possible in case of shopping from a market as he would be putting in hour's of effort for searching the item of his choice and comparing the best price for the same. Time is probably the most important asset a human being has and in online shopping they are able to save a lot of time when are shown all the available options simultaneously and there is an option of home delivery as well, although sometimes the items may arrive a few days late but they wont have to waste their time going and searching for the product in the market. Also the option of getting the product delivered at your home at little extra cost is available. This is the case with daily hosehold items and grocery with sellers such as Big-basket where they guarantee fresh produce or you can return the items is also a lucrative deal which you may not get otherwise. The only downside to this is that you may not get the first hand experience of the product before buying it, ie- you cannot wear the shoes or the shirt that you plan to buy from amazon or check the quality of the groceries before placing the order, To compensate for this consumers generally rely on reviews or the possibility of returning or replacing the item incase they dont like them but whatever be the case there is still a void of first hand experience that cannot be replaced. Although in my opinion the lack of first hand experience can be overlooked when compared to numerous advantages of buying things online.
Buying things on the internet e. g, books, air tickets and groceries are catching popularity in the new modern era of technology with the increasing number of
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services and startups catering to these services.

According to my opinion the advantages for the premise outweigh the disadvantages by far, this is happening due to the increased comfort and more
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available
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options
a consumer can
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get
while shopping
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online
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wether
it is for groceries, air tickets or books. A consumer can
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get
all the
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available
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options
for a
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product
and compare for the best price
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online
in the instant of a mouse click
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but
that won't be possible in case of shopping from a market as he would be putting in hour's of effort for searching the
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item
of his choice and comparing the best price for the same.

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probably
the most
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important
asset a human being has and in
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online
shopping they are able to save
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a lot of
time when
are shown
all the
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available
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options
simultaneously
and there is an
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option
of home delivery
as well
, although
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sometimes
the
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items
may arrive a few days late
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they
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waste their time going and searching for the
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in the market.
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the
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of getting the
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product
delivered at your home at
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little
extra cost is
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. This is the case with daily
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hosehold
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items
and grocery with sellers such as
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Big
-basket where they guarantee fresh produce or you can return the
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items
is
also
a lucrative deal which you may not
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otherwise
.

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downside to this is that you may not
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or
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the quality of the groceries
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before
placing the order, To compensate for
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consumers
generally
rely on reviews or the possibility of returning or replacing the
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item
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incase
they
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dont
like them
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but
whatever be the case there is
still
a void of
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first hand
experience that cannot
be replaced
. Although in my opinion the lack of
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first hand
experience can
be overlooked
when compared to numerous advantages of buying things
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online
.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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