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1Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

1Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 1
When it comes to coexistence in society, we all know that living education starts in childhood, but who should provide it has separated opinions. This essay will discuss both the responsibilities of parenting and school in this chore. Firstly, how children learn good behaviour at home and then, the role of schools when these children face different situations. On the one hand, we have a strong connection between familiar members, which are full of respect and affectivity that allows the children to learn the empathy in a fast and effective way. In 2005, a study in United State showed that infants that have not gone to school before the age of 10, when they are developing their social skills, had good behaviour when confronted with other persons out of their family. They could interact and create 40% more links than other kids in the same age, that spent the majority of their time at school. On the other hand, these same children that have not attended school, couldn't solve social problems when in a different environment. Issues like working in groups and sharing, lead them to a high level of stress. According to scientists, teachers have an essential role in these cases, because they support and guide the group of students to find a better solution in facing their differences. To conclude, children learn better to appreciate living in a community when developing their social skills at home, but also, those who have learned the same rules at school can collaborate and enjoy as well, even facing challenges situation. In my personal opinion, both situations are important during their grown, as long they turn able to be good members of society.
When it
comes
to coexistence in society, we all know that living education
starts
in childhood,
but
who should provide it has separated opinions. This essay will discuss both the responsibilities of parenting and
school
in this chore.
Firstly
, how
children
learn
good
behaviour
at home and then, the role of
schools
when these
children
face
different
situations.

On the one hand, we have a strong
connection between
familiar members, which are full of respect and
affectivity
that
allows
the
children
to learn the empathy in a
fast
and effective way. In 2005, a study in United State
showed
that infants that have not gone to
school
before
the age of 10, when they are developing their social
skills
, had
good
behaviour
when confronted with other persons out of their family. They could interact and create 40% more links than other kids in the same age, that spent the majority of their time at school.

On the other hand
, these same
children
that have not attended
school
, couldn't solve social problems when in a
different
environment. Issues like working in groups and sharing, lead them to a high level of
stress
. According to scientists, teachers have an essential role in these cases,
because
they support and guide the group of students to find a better solution in facing their differences.

To conclude
,
children
learn better to appreciate living in a community when developing their social
skills
at home,
but
also
, those who have learned the same
rules
at
school
can collaborate and enjoy
as well
, even facing challenges situation. In my personal opinion, both situations are
important
during their grown, as long they turn able to be
good
members of society.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay 1Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
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