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14. 09. 2017 Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.2

14. 09. 2017 Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. 2
Many aver that it is parents’ duty to educate their offspring how to be a decent citizen. At the same time, some claim that schools ought to be responsible for forging benevolent members of the community. Below both prospect will be discussed in details and author’s opinion will be stated. On the one hand, parents who by default know their progeny better may effectively pass on them social norms and mores. To illustrate, a mother starts to explain to her daughter what is wrong and good at an early age by talking to her, prizing right and punishing vicious conduct. When kids become older parents, who are perceived by dependent children as a paragon and ideal, teach the youngsters via demonstration how to correctly interact with a family and with others. In other words, parents have auspicious circumstances that allow them to form offspring’s understanding of social norms. On the other hand, there are well-prepared educators who were trained at university how to work with young people efficiently. Those professionals may change the society via shaping children’s mores and social standards in a desirable direction. For example, the attitude to LGBT society in western countries such as Germany, Canada, the USA, France and the UK has been changing dramatically within this decade. This alteration has been achieved via novel educational programs that were implemented at elementary and secondary school by the staff. In other words, a school system is a powerful tool of a state that must be used to steer community to a right direction. In conclusion, although parents could influence and shape descendants’ consciousness, such social institution as school ought to be responsible for the task because it gives a chance to get rid of obsolete norms and create more proper ones.
Many
aver that it is
parents’
duty to educate their offspring how to be a decent citizen. At the same time,
some
claim that
schools
ought to be responsible for forging benevolent members of the community. Below both prospect will
be discussed
in
details
and author’s opinion will
be stated
.

On the one hand,
parents
who by default know their progeny better may
effectively
pass on them
social
norms and mores. To illustrate, a mother
starts
to
explain
to her daughter what is
wrong
and
good
at an early age by talking to her, prizing right and punishing vicious conduct. When kids become older
parents
, who
are perceived
by dependent children as a paragon and ideal, teach the youngsters via demonstration how to
correctly
interact with a family and with others. In
other
words,
parents
have auspicious circumstances that
allow
them to form offspring’s understanding of
social
norms.

On the
other
hand, there are well-prepared educators who
were trained
at university how to work with young
people
efficiently
. Those professionals may
change
the society via shaping children’s mores and
social
standards in a desirable direction.
For example
, the attitude to LGBT society in western countries such as Germany, Canada, the USA, France and the UK has been changing
dramatically
within this decade. This alteration has
been achieved
via novel educational programs that
were implemented
at elementary and secondary
school
by the staff. In
other
words, a
school
system is a powerful tool of a state that
must
be
used
to steer community to a right direction.

In conclusion
, although
parents
could influence and shape descendants’ consciousness, such
social
institution as
school
ought to be responsible for the task
because
it gives a chance to
get
rid of obsolete norms and create more proper ones.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay 14. 09. 2017 Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. 2

Essay
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4 paragraphs
294 words
6.5
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