14. 09. 2017 Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.1
14. 09. 2017 Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. 1
It is true that some individuals are more studious and workaholic in comparison with other members in society. Although it can be beneficial for them in reaching their goals, I think that it can affect people’s health and social life adversely.
There are several reasons behind some people’s being hardworking and one of them is for having better living conditions. Some employees work extra shifts in order to earn more money. They believe that with the extra income earned, they can buy comforts for themselves and their families. In addition, most newly employed workers tend to work for long hours than others to reach the target which is set by their employers in order to secure their job. They are worried that if they fail to reach their goal, they can be replaced by more competent people.
Along with positive sides, there are also negative aspects of working hard. First of all, extensive working hours can lead to stress and fatigue. As a result of this, people’s work performance drop and it has a huge effect on their way to success. For example, after a long working day almost no one is interested in continuing to work at home, because everyone needs a rest. Furthermore, due to overload of work and odd working hours, people do not give time to their family. Consequently, arguments may arise between partners in creating trouble in their relationship.
To summarize, it is evident that hard work allows people to achieve their career goals and earn more money. However, in my opinion, working hard, neglecting one's health and family is never a risk worth taking.
It is true that
some
individuals are more studious and workaholic
in comparison
with other members in society. Although it can be beneficial for them in reaching their goals, I
think
that it can affect
people’s
health and social life
adversely
.
There are several reasons behind
some
people’s
being hardworking and one of them is for having better living conditions.
Some
employees
work
extra shifts in order to earn more money. They believe that with the extra income earned, they can
buy
comforts for themselves and their families.
In addition
, most
newly
employed workers tend to
work
for long hours than others to reach the target which
is set
by their employers in order to secure their job. They
are worried
that if they fail to reach their goal, they can
be replaced
by more competent
people
.
Along with
positive
sides, there are
also
negative
aspects of
working
hard
.
First of all
, extensive
working
hours can lead to
stress
and fatigue.
As a result
of this,
people’s
work
performance drop and it has a huge effect on their way to success.
For example
, after a long
working
day almost no one
is interested
in continuing to
work
at home,
because
everyone needs a rest.
Furthermore
, due to overload of
work
and odd
working
hours,
people
do not give time to their family.
Consequently
, arguments may arise between partners in creating trouble in their relationship.
To summarize
, it is evident that
hard
work
allows
people
to achieve their career goals and earn more money.
However
, in my opinion,
working
hard
, neglecting one's health and family is never a
risk
worth taking.
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