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Young people always spend more time to culture activities

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Young people always spend more time to culture activities like music, theater, but spending time on both is important so we need to do all. Sport gives you a good health and you will feel fun when you play sport. When you play a sport you can study a lot of things such as: How can play this sport and so on. But cultural activities are important too. Why? Because you need to do it. After a hard, stress, pressure day. You need to play a music, go to the theater to relax. But everything has bad points. Cultural activities are more expensive. For example, when you buy a musical instrument. It's really expensive. Playing sports are cheaper than cultural activities but it's dangerous and you can have an accident. In my opinion, if you choose cultural activities so don't choose cultural activities. For example: when you focused on sports. It means" I want to be a famous badminton player" so it can make you stress and pressure. So do only one thing when you think what is suitable for you.
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IELTS academic Young people always spend more time to culture activities

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