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Writing task 1, describing the graph

Writing task 1, describing the graph ewRVK
The chart illustrates the comparison of how popular different forms of travelling to work were in 1996 and 2006 in a New Zealand city. As can be seen from the chart, private cars or trucks were several times more popular than other means of transport in both years, while the least demanded form was motorcycle. There are some features that increased in popularity by 2006. Company vehicle was used by only 9 percent of employees in 1996, and by 2006 the number of commuters who used it grew to 15 percent. Moreover, public buses have become two percent more frequently used than in 1996. Additionally, about 8 percent of suburban livers used a bicycle for travelling to work in 1996, but then the popularity of this form of transport increased to 10 percent by 2006. As for the vehicles that became less demanded by 2006, private car or truck can be considered. In 1996 50 percent of commuters used private transport, but by 2006 the figure changed to 38 percent. Furthermore, 9 percent of employees worked at home in 1996, while. One percent less suburbans walked or jogged to work in 2006 in comparison with the index 7 in 1996. The train was used by 3 percent of commuters in 1996, but the number of users decreased to 2 percent in 2006.
The chart illustrates the comparison of how popular
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forms of travelling to work were in 1996 and 2006 in a New Zealand city.

As can be
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from the chart, private cars or trucks were several times more popular than other means of transport in both years, while the least demanded form was motorcycle.

There are
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features that increased in popularity by 2006.
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vehicle was
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used
by
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only
9
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of employees in 1996, and by 2006 the number of commuters who
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it grew to 15
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.
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, public buses have become two
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more
frequently
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used
than in 1996.
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, about 8
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of suburban livers
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used
a bicycle for travelling to work in 1996,
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then the popularity of this form of transport increased to 10
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by 2006.

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. In 1996 50
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of commuters
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used
private transport,
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by 2006 the figure
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changed
to 38
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.
Furthermore
, 9
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of employees worked at home in 1996, while. One
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suburbans walked or jogged to work in 2006
in comparison
with the index 7 in 1996. The train was
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by 3
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of commuters in 1996,
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the number of users decreased to 2
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in 2006.
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IELTS academic Writing task 1, describing the graph

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
222 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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