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The two pie charts and table below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise ths information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The two pie charts and table below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise ths information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. BbVp
The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sale across different retail sectors in canada in the years 2005 and 2010. For three of the sectors, it is evident that over this time frame there was significant change in their proportion of online transactions. At 35% we can see that electronics and appliance sector accounted for the majority of online sales in 2005, but this percentage had dropped 30% by 2010. During the same five-year period, as an increasing number of people choose to purchase food and beverage online, we can see that transactions went from just 22% to 32%, making in the retail sector with the largest overall the proportion of the online market. In 2005, the home furnishing industry boasted an impressive 25% of the total online sales in canada. However, by, 2010 the figure had fallen considerably to 15%. Interestingly, online sales of video games eventually overtook sales of home furnishings, although video games still represented only 23% of the market.
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IELTS academic The two pie charts and table below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise ths information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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