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The the graph below shows the number of passenger railway Journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5

The the graph below shows the number of passenger railway Journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5 17Jq
The line graph illustrate the number travellers using in national railway network, london underground and light railway and metro system from 1950 to 2004-2005. the scale is in million's. To begin with, the passengers who were using national train network and london underground in 1050 was 1000 million and 700 millions respectively. which declined in 1980 national rail network approximately by 300 million and London underground by 200 minions in just 30 years period. After 1980 they both were continuously rise in 2004 -2005 they were nearly to 1000 million. However the light rail and metro system was slightly up from the starting point and in 2004-2005 with approximately 200 millions passengers journeys. Overall, the travellers train journey made in three system increase, but on london underground it increase dramatically. The national railway network and London under underground were 1000 million 600 millions it is decrease to the 1980 and after that they both were approximately 1000 million in 2004-2005 and in this period the light rail and metro system slightly increase and reched 200 million in 2004-2005.
The line graph illustrate the number
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using in
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national
railway
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network
,
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london
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underground
and light railway and metro
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system
from 1950 to 2004-2005.
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the
scale is in
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million
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national
train
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network
and
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london
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underground
in 1050 was 1000
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million
and 700
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millions
respectively
.
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which
declined in 1980
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national
rail
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network
approximately by 300
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million
and London
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underground
by 200 minions in
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just
30 years period.
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After
1980 they both were
continuously
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rise
in 2004 -2005 they were
nearly
to 1000
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million
.
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However
the light rail and metro
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system
was
slightly
up from the starting point and in 2004-2005 with approximately 200
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millions
passengers journeys.

Overall
, the
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travellers
train journey made in three
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increase,
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but
on
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london
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underground
it
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increase
dramatically
. The
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national
railway
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network
and London under
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underground
were 1000
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million
600
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millions
it is decrease to the 1980 and after that they both were approximately 1000
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million
in 2004-2005 and in this period the light rail and metro
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system
slightly
increase and
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reched
200
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million
in 2004-2005.
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IELTS academic The the graph below shows the number of passenger railway Journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5

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