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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum 55PQp
The following table illustrates the number of visitor to Ashdown Museum before and after the refurbishment while the pie charts show the results of surveys of visitor satisfaction before and after the refurbishment. At first glance, it is evident that refurbishment gives good result as there is a significant increase in annual visitor numbers and the ratio of very satisfied people. From the table, Ashdown Museum received more visitors after refurbishment, 74000 people visited the museum in the final 12 months of its original condition means before renovation but this jumped by 18000 in the year following the improvements. Furthermore with a pie char that describes visitor satisfaction in ratio. Before the refurbishment, almost half of the surveyed visitors were unhappy, 10% were very disappointed, 40% were dissatisfied. 30% of people are satisfied, doubled the proportion of very satisfied individuals. Coming to year after refurbishment, the ratio of very satisfied and satisfied visitors rose by 10% and 20% respectively whereas the proportion of the dissatisfied people dwindled to 15% and the percentage of very dissatisfied visitors decreased to half to 5%. The ratio of no response in both the year before and after refurbishment are the same with 5%.
The following table illustrates the number of
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Ashdown
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Ashdown
Museum received more
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after
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, 74000
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people
visited the museum in the final 12 months of its original condition means
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renovation
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this jumped by 18000 in the year following the improvements.

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, almost half of the surveyed
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disappointed, 40%
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, doubled the proportion of
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rose by 10% and 20%
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dwindled to 15% and the percentage of
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dissatisfied
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decreased to half to 5%.

The
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of no response in both the year
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are the same with 5%.
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