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The provided bar chart illustrates the information about how many individuals in the UK have fruits and vegetables five times a day between 2001 to 2008. It is depicted by regarded graph. The data has calibrated in the percentage .

The provided bar chart illustrates the information about how many individuals in the UK have fruits and vegetables five times a day between 2001 to 2008. It is depicted by regarded graph. The data has calibrated in the percentage. nNXYn
To sum up, the vegetables and fruit diet was popular mostly among women. whereas, others followed the opposite trend. Analyzing the data about which category confer preference to fruits and vegetables, in 2001 women ate healthy food approximately 23% and it was a little increase more than 30% and after two years there was a minor decline manifested eating nutrition food by women at the end of the period there had been nearly 28%. Furthermore, the rate of ate by men more than fifteen percent. Whereas, offspring figure was fallen to 12%. In 2001. Moreover after three year there was a static 13 to 15% respectively. Nevertheless, in the followed year, there had been a dramatic rose up noticed between childrens and males which was accounted 25% in 2006. However, in the followed year increased 30% at the end of the period there was sharply climbed up which was more than thirty at the end of period.
To sum up, the vegetables and fruit diet was popular
mostly
among women.
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whereas
, others followed the opposite trend. Analyzing the data about which category confer preference to fruits and vegetables, in 2001 women
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ate
healthy food approximately 23% and it was a
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increase more than 30% and after two years there was a minor decline manifested eating nutrition food by women at the
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of the period there had been
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28%.
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more than fifteen percent.
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increased 30% at the
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