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The provided bar and polyline graph compares the weekly expenditure of Britishers on three types of junk food in 1990 and consumption of these items from 1970 to 1990.

The provided bar and polyline graph compares the weekly expenditure of Britishers on three types of junk food in 1990 and consumption of these items from 1970 to 1990. 2lWYw
The provided bar and polyline graph compares the weekly expenditure of Britishers on three types of junk food in 1990 and consumption of these items from 1970 to 1990. The data has been caliberated in numbers and grams. From an overall, it is analysed that, the substantial proportion of individuals with high income preferred to eat hamburgers, however vice versa pattern was showed in case of pizza. whereas, in 70's most consumed item is pizza but fish and chips utilization show domenancy over it. To begin with the bar grpah, high income earners spent more cash on hamburgers rather then other street food items. Average income earners also inclined towards hamburger between 10 to 25 pence they spend on other items. Fish and chips are more preferable food by the low wages earners and the least propotion of money spend by then on pizza. Turning to the line graph in 1970, 300 gram pizza was engross by the individuals but in following years there was a decline can be noticed at in the terminating years and recorded to be 200 gram. whereas, 0 to 100 gram consumption of hamburger and fish and chips was noticed in initial years, with the passing of time there was increase was considered in people's intrest towards there two fast food items. In 90's purchase of hamburger stuck on 300 gram on the other hand fish and chips reached the palteu, which is 500 grams
The provided bar and
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polyline
graph compares the weekly expenditure of Britishers on three types of junk
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food
in 1990 and consumption of these
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items
from 1970 to 1990. The data has been
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caliberated
in numbers and grams.

From an
overall
, it is
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analysed
that, the substantial proportion of individuals with high income preferred to eat hamburgers,
however
vice versa pattern was
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showed
in case of pizza.
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whereas
, in
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70's
most consumed
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item
is pizza
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but
fish and chips utilization
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show
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domenancy
over it.

To
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begin
with the bar
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grpah
, high income earners spent more cash on hamburgers
rather
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then
other street
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food
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items
. Average income earners
also
inclined towards hamburger
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between 10 to 25
pence they spend on other
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items
. Fish and chips are more preferable
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food
by the low wages earners and the least
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propotion
of money spend by
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then
on pizza.

Turning to the line graph in 1970, 300
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gram
pizza was
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engross
by the individuals
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but
in following years there was a decline can
be noticed
at in the terminating years and recorded to be 200
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gram
.
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whereas
, 0 to 100
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gram
consumption of hamburger and fish and chips
was noticed
in initial years, with the passing of time there was increase
was considered
in
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people
's
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intrest
towards there two
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fast
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food
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items
. In
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90's
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purchase
of hamburger stuck on 300
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gram
on the other hand
fish and chips reached the
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palteu
, which is 500
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grams
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IELTS academic The provided bar and polyline graph compares the weekly expenditure of Britishers on three types of junk food in 1990 and consumption of these items from 1970 to 1990.

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