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The pie charts show the energy production in France by fuel sources oil, hydro power, nuclear, coal in 1990 and 2020.

The pie charts show the energy production in France by fuel sources oil, hydro power, nuclear, coal in 1990 and 2020. pXra3
Five different types of energy production in France are represented in the two pie charts above, one from 1990 and other from 2010. Over the past two decades, France's use of Nuclear Power for electricity generation has increased significantly, while it is use of Natural gas has decreased dramatically. A decline ws also seen in the oil, coal and hydroelectric industries. In 1990, nuclear energy accounted 17& of France's electricity production according to the energy information. Natural gas and coal attributed for 28% of the total. Only a little more than fifth of energy was produced using oil. As a result hydropower generated very small proportion of energy in 1990 and 2010. Both oil and coal used as a source of electricity in 2010 saw sharp declines, with coal falling to 13% and natural gas dropping to 4% respectively. For the first time cover nuclear power contributed for 67% of all electricity production in 2010.
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use
of Nuclear Power for
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generation has increased
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in the oil, coal and hydroelectric industries.

In 1990, nuclear
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accounted 17& of France's
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electricity
production according to the
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information. Natural gas and coal attributed for 28% of the total.
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in 1990 and 2010.

Both oil and coal
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in 2010
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sharp declines, with coal falling to 13% and natural gas dropping to 4%
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. For the
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electricity
production in 2010.
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the energy production in France by fuel sources oil, hydro power, nuclear, coal in 1990 and 2020.

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