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The pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household, and the table shows the amount of electricity used according to the number of occupants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household, and the table shows the amount of electricity used according to the number of occupants. gjyL
The provided charts illustrate the area of energy consuming household chores and the amount of electricity which is used as per the number of residents in typical Australian home. Overall its clear that most of the energy used for heating and cooling and lest energy for stand by power. Furthermore, amount of electricity used more in people who stayed with more than 6 people in the house. A key takeaway from the pie chart is that, as regards heating and cooling it accounted for 38% and quater amount of energy which used for water heating. As regards other appliance which comprised of 16% energy. Infact only 7% of energy which utilised for lighting and fridge and freezers respectively. Whereas, relatively lowest amount of energy 4% and 3% spend for cooking and stand by power. Moreover, table chart shows that the usage of current based on the number of people who lived in the house. Interestingly, the people who are stayed with more than 6 members utilised 12000- 16000 kilowatt hours per year but the person who stayed single used 5000-6500 kilowatt hours per year. However, around 6000-10000 kilowatt spend yearly in the house which consists of 2 to 3 members.
The provided charts illustrate the area of
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energy
consuming household chores and the
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amount
of electricity which is
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used
as per the number of residents in typical Australian home.
Overall
its
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clear
that most of the
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energy
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used
for heating and cooling and lest
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energy
for stand by power.
Furthermore
,
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amount
of electricity
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used
more in
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people
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who
stayed with more than 6
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people
in the
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house
. A key takeaway from the pie chart is that, as regards heating and cooling it accounted for 38% and
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quater
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amount
of
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energy
which
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used
for water heating.
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As
regards other appliance
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which comprised of
16%
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energy
.
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Infact
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7% of
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energy
which
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utilised
for lighting and fridge and freezers
respectively
. Whereas,
relatively
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lowest
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of
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energy
4% and 3% spend for cooking and stand by power.
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, table chart
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shows
that the usage of
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current
based on the number of
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people
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who
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lived
in the
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house
.
Interestingly
, the
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people
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who
are stayed
with more than 6 members
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utilised
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12000- 16000
kilowatt hours per year
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but
the person
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who
stayed single
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used
5000-6500 kilowatt hours per year.
However
, around 6000-10000 kilowatt spend yearly in the
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house
which consists of 2 to 3 members.
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household, and the table shows the amount of electricity used according to the number of occupants.

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