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The given line charts clearly depicts information regarding the number of overseas tourists, measured in thousands, in 3 particularly areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. The 3 areas include the coast, the mountains, and lakes. Overall, it can be noticeable that there is an upward trend. In deep detail, it can be notice that the quantity of overseas travelers at the coast, the mountains and the lakes experienced the upward trend. To be specific, the quantity of overseas travelers at the coast dipped shortly from 40 in 1987 to 35 in 1992 and then escalated gradually to 75 in 2007. Meanwhile, although that at the mountain had boosted slightly from 20 to 30 in the first ten years before increasing gently to 35 at the end. Finally, the quantity at the lakes; there was a gradual climb from 10 at the beginning to 40 in 1997 and then a moest grow to 50 at the end of period.

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 line charts clearly
 depicts information regarding the number of overseas tourists, measured in thousands, in 3 particularly
 areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. The 3 areas include the coast, the mountains, and lakes. Overall
, it can be noticeable that there is an upward trend.

In deep detail, it can be notice that the quantity of overseas travelers at the coast, the mountains and the lakes experienced the upward trend. To be specific, the quantity of overseas travelers at the coast dipped shortly from 40 in 1987 to 35 in 1992 and then escalated gradually
 to 75 in 2007. Meanwhile, although that at the mountain had boosted slightly
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 to 35 at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
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. Finally
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IELTS academic the number of overseas tourists

Academic

American English

2 paragraphs

161 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

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