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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate the refinement applied to a university campus since 2010 till our present day. Overall, it can be seen that the green color corresponding to trees and grass is decreasing which is confronted with an increase and development of new building. To begin with, on the other side of the road where there is no lake it can be noticed that the science building have been replaced by a building composing of university offices. Also, one of the trees there was cut down. Looking now at the lake side of the road, the lawn and seating area beside the lake were removed so as the restaurant which was demolished. Moreover, the arts and science building block have been upgraded to arts building only containing more floors. In addition to that, a new tall construction concerning student accommodation was raised at the expanse of the two shops which were merged with the old student accommodation building to form a freshly upgraded student facility which contain a lot of offices and other things.
The maps illustrate the refinement applied to a university campus since 2010 till our present day.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the green color corresponding to trees and grass is decreasing which
is confronted
with an increase and development of new building.

To
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begin
with, on the other side of the road where there is no lake it can
be noticed
that the science
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building
have
been replaced
by a
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building
composing of university offices.
Also
, one of the trees there was
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cut
down.

Looking
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now
at the
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lake side
of the road, the lawn and seating area beside the lake
were removed
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so
as the restaurant which
was demolished
.
Moreover
, the arts and science
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building
block have
been upgraded
to arts
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building
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only
containing more floors.
In addition
to that, a new tall construction concerning student accommodation
was raised
at the expanse of the two shops which
were merged
with the
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old
student accommodation
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building
to form a
freshly
upgraded student facility which contain
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a lot of
offices and other things.
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IELTS academic The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

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6.5
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