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The line graph shows the number of parcel delivered by two company fedex and tnt from 1920 to 2000.

The line graph shows the number of parcel delivered by two company fedex and tnt from 1920 to 2000. KG590
The given line graph illustrates information about the number of parcel deliver of Fedex and TNT two mejor mail services company between 1920 and 2000. Overall, the number of parcel delivered by fedex was higher than that of tnt till 1985 then tnt passed away of fedex. Fedex had highest parcel delivery in 1940 as opposed to tnt in 2000, whereas least number of parcel delivery was in 1960 for fedex as against of tnt in 1920. Fedex's parcel delivery went though a period of instability where tnt grew up gradually over the given period. In terms of fedex, the accounted parcel delivery was exact 15000 in the beginning which rose up nearly to 25000 in 1940 before falling down aeound to 13000 in 1960. In the next decade, the number of parcel sent by fedex gradually boosted by about 4000 and remaimd constant till the end. In respect of tnt, on the other hand they delivered parcel to the customers Between 1920 and 1960 grew up constantly from 5000 to 12000. It stayed though a faint change untill 1980 before soaring up dramatically to above 25000 in the remaining years.
The
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given
line graph illustrates information about the
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number
of
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parcel
deliver of
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Fedex
and
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TNT
two
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mejor
mail services
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company
between 1920 and 2000.

Overall
, the
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number
of
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parcel
delivered by
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fedex
was higher than that of
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tnt
till 1985 then
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tnt
passed away of
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fedex
.
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Fedex
had
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highest
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parcel
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delivery
in 1940 as opposed to
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tnt
in 2000, whereas least
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number
of
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parcel
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delivery
was in 1960 for
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fedex
as against of
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tnt
in 1920.
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Fedex
's
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parcel
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delivery
went
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though
a period of instability where
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tnt
grew up
gradually
over the
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given
period.

In terms of
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fedex
, the accounted
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parcel
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delivery
was exact 15000 in the beginning which rose up
nearly
to 25000 in 1940
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before
falling down
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aeound
to 13000 in 1960. In the
next
decade, the
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of
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parcel
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sent
by
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fedex
gradually
boosted by about 4000 and
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remaimd
constant till the
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.

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In
respect of
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tnt
,
on the other hand
they delivered
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parcel
to the customers Between 1920 and 1960 grew up
constantly
from 5000 to 12000. It stayed though a faint
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change
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untill
1980
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before
soaring up
dramatically
to above 25000 in the remaining years.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the number of parcel delivered by two company fedex and tnt from 1920 to 2000.

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