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The line graph depicts changes in fish and meat consumption in a particular European country from 1979 to 2004.

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The line graph depicts changes in fish and meat consumption in a particular European country from 1979 to 2004. Overall, the decreasing demand for sales of beef, fish, and lamb along with increasing consumption of chicken is clear. In particular, numbers of beef and lamb sales had hit their peak in 1989 after had experienced a dramatic decline by 2004. In 1979, beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. However, during the 25-year period, the consumption of beef and lamb fell dramatically to approximately 100 grams and 55 grams respectively. As for the fish consumption, it did not experience any significant changes, although its numbers fell down from almost 60 to around 40. Besides, its consumption levels were the most stable, even it remained the least popular food. In comparison, chicken consumption skyrocketed from a little less than 150 to 250 by 2004. It overtook all of the other kinds of food by 2004.
The line graph depicts
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changes
in fish and meat
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consumption
in a particular European country from 1979 to 2004.

Overall
, the decreasing demand for sales of
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beef
, fish, and lamb along with increasing
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consumption
of chicken is
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clear
.

In particular
, numbers of
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beef
and lamb sales had hit their peak in 1989 after had experienced a dramatic decline by 2004. In 1979,
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beef
was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week.
However
, during the 25-year period, the
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consumption
of
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beef
and lamb fell
dramatically
to approximately 100 grams and 55 grams
respectively
.

As for the fish
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consumption
, it did not experience any significant
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changes
, although its numbers fell down from almost 60 to around 40.
Besides
, its
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consumption
levels were the most stable, even it remained the least popular food.

In comparison
, chicken
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consumption
skyrocketed from a
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little
less than 150 to 250 by 2004. It overtook
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all of the
other kinds of food by 2004.
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IELTS academic The line graph depicts changes in fish and meat consumption in a particular European country from 1979 to 2004.

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